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StratMatt
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0 posted 09-19-99 05:24 PM       View Profile for StratMatt   Email StratMatt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StratMatt's Home Page   View IP for StratMatt

This is a poem I wrote about 3 months ago. I
was especially proud of the constant meter carried all the way through. Usually I am more a free verse kind of poet. Tell me what you think.


#5 By: Matt Talken

The battlelines were drawn.
The opponents engaged.
Strong words were your weapons.
Insensitivity,
My heart was hid behind.
My counter offensive
struck deep with your heart
and deep within my soul

Trodding on the borders
Between our love and hate
Unbridled Passion clashed
This conflict was our fate
A war of wills, not fists
The victor reigns supreme
Unchallenged by the lost
Combatant slain unseen

No winner in this game
A clash between our hearts
Where winners fall of guilt
While losers are torn apart
But in this conflict lies,
pursuit and a retreat
For in these fallen hearts
Lies our souls' defeat

© Copyright 1999 Matthew Talken - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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I think this is nicely done Matt and very well stated...it flowed fairly smoothly and inspired the reader to stop and think a moment...always a good thing!

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
StratMatt
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2 posted 09-19-99 09:31 PM       View Profile for StratMatt   Email StratMatt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StratMatt's Home Page   View IP for StratMatt

Thanks. It's not often I try to put that great an amount of metaphor in a poem as to make the reader think a lot. It's nice that someone appriciated it.
-Matt
 
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