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Cocaine Baby...(PLEASE READ)

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Echo Rhayne
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0 posted 09-19-99 01:54 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Horrible is life with it's unending pain
for the child who is born addicted to cocaine

Hooked up to machines - with tubes in his nose
he lies on the sheets in his crucifix pose

He shivers and shakes, his muscles knot tight
he suffers each day and all through the night

The linen white ladies keep sharp, watchful eyes
on the quivering infant breathing pitiful cries

But they cannot help him, no more can they do
but wait hour by hour hoping he might pull through

He struggles for life with all of his might
but his will cannot save him - he's too weak to fight

His body gives out on the next breath he takes
and his heartbeat grows fainter till no sound he makes

The pain is now lessened - ready to cease
and death finally comes with it's comforting peace

And while the innocent pays for the sins of another
back to the streets walks his cocaine mother...
© Copyright 1999 Echo Rhayne - All Rights Reserved
Lucie
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1 posted 09-19-99 02:29 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

This is a very intense topic. You expressed it wonderfully.
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 09-19-99 02:33 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

You did an amazing job on this.....the imigery although intense was excellent. Well done

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
caroline
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3 posted 09-19-99 02:51 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Chilling...an important message is in these words.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Dark Angel
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4 posted 09-19-99 03:58 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

yes I agree, a very important message. Well done

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Denise
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5 posted 09-19-99 12:48 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well expressed. Truly tragic.

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Denise
Trynete
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6 posted 09-19-99 01:10 PM       View Profile for Trynete   Email Trynete   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Trynete's Home Page   View IP for Trynete

Wow, that just makes me want to cry, how was this inspired?
Pepper
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7 posted 09-19-99 01:24 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

profound....very well done....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
S.Ford
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8 posted 09-20-1999 01:55 PM       View Profile for S.Ford   Email S.Ford   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for S.Ford

sad....but beautifuly put
Michael
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9 posted 09-20-1999 02:02 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Very poignant message here, Echo.
A sad and sometimes overlooked problem of society. At least here in California there have been some recent law changes to hold the mother accountable in situations like these {It should be like that everywhere}.

Chilling, indeed.

Michael
WhtDove
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10 posted 09-20-1999 02:06 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

It has been here(IL.)Michael. If you are found to have drugs in your system the baby will be taken from you and you go to jail.

This was a hard subject, you did a great job with it! You brought tears to my eyes!
Echo Rhayne
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11 posted 09-20-1999 03:15 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Lucie, hoot_owl_rn, caroline, Dark Angel, dsnyder, S.Ford, WhtDove, Jay_Jay, and Toerag...Thank you for your comments.
Trynete...This happened to my friends sister and it inspired me a lot.
Michael...I live in California too, and yes I am grateful for the law change myself. This happened a couple years ago though and not in California either.
ALL...I write poems to vent feelings, but this one I also wanted to get a message accross with as well. Thank you all for taking the time to read it!

[This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 09-20-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 09-20-1999).]
Jay_Jay
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12 posted 09-20-1999 04:10 PM       View Profile for Jay_Jay   Email Jay_Jay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jay_Jay

WOW, Echo...Deep poem, with a good message. I cried

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Never allow life to get in the way of living...
Toerag
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13 posted 09-20-1999 04:15 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Wonderfully done, sad, true poem....
Sean
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14 posted 09-20-1999 06:11 PM       View Profile for Sean   Email Sean   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Sean

Great poem Echo...tears once more in my eyes. You have brought a powerful message with this poem.
Blondie
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15 posted 09-20-1999 07:40 PM       View Profile for Blondie   Email Blondie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blondie

very vivid imagery you use here...wonderful poem
Isis
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16 posted 09-20-1999 07:49 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Such a tragic story, so sad for the innocent. So lovingly told.

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~Isis~


Echo Rhayne
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17 posted 09-20-1999 08:49 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Thank you for your comments and taking the time out to read it. I appreciate it!
beowulf_26
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18 posted 09-20-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for beowulf_26   Email beowulf_26   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for beowulf_26

ouch. I was hoping for a happier ending. However, the world is not so. I guess nobody wins in the end. VERY good poem.
Beki
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19 posted 09-20-1999 09:57 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Powerful poem, hauntingly intense. You said it well without resorting to melodramatic tactics. The problem is one of so many that plague newborns today...alcohol babies are nearly as handicapped. You did a very admirable job with this piece. :-)

Michael and Echo, where in California do you live?

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--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
Systematic Decay
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20 posted 09-20-1999 10:58 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

That was a great poem. I hate to see someone innocent pay for the mistakes of another
Echo Rhayne
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21 posted 09-21-1999 02:55 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Thank you all for your comments...
beowulf_26...I wish I could have ended the poem happier, but I dont think it would have gotten the message through, and also this is a true strory and it didn't end happy, so, well, you know. Thank you for taking the time out to read my poem.

Beki...You're right, alcohol babies are nearly as handicapped too, I have dealt with that many of times as well. As for where in Cali I live, I live in the Santa Clarita Valley, or as most people now us by, Magic Mountain. Thank you fot taking the time to read the poem.

Systematic Decay...I hate to see someone innocent pay for another as well, and that is partially why this poem was written! Thank you for taking the time to read it!
Ayla
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22 posted 09-21-1999 06:50 AM       View Profile for Ayla   Email Ayla   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ayla

Great but sad poem...

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The heart is happiest when it beats for others..
DBeth
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23 posted 09-21-1999 09:56 AM       View Profile for DBeth   Email DBeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DBeth

It is so sad to see people suffer,especially the innocent young children.The world can be so cruel.What is real sad is that there are many,many women and couples that would give up everything they own to have a healthy baby.Yet,they are not able to have children of their own.Instead the ones that don't need them or (want them) have them everyday.Now that is sad.I'm truly sorry for your friend.
But very nice poem,well written!!
DBeth

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When we give of ourselves
whole heartedly,it comes
back around ten fold.
Echo Rhayne
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24 posted 09-22-1999 12:33 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

DBeth....I believe it is terribly sad to see people suffer,especially the innocent young children as well. You're right, the world can be so cruel. So unfair in times...the majority of times. But I have high hopes and I hope that MAYBE I can do some small part by getting a message accross to other people who care and can make a difference. Thank you for taking the time to read an respond to this poem!
 
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