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Cocaine Baby...(PLEASE READ)
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Cocaine Baby...(PLEASE READ) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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Horrible is life with it's unending pain for the child who is born addicted to cocaine Hooked up to machines - with tubes in his nose he lies on the sheets in his crucifix pose He shivers and shakes, his muscles knot tight he suffers each day and all through the night The linen white ladies keep sharp, watchful eyes on the quivering infant breathing pitiful cries But they cannot help him, no more can they do but wait hour by hour hoping he might pull through He struggles for life with all of his might but his will cannot save him - he's too weak to fight His body gives out on the next breath he takes and his heartbeat grows fainter till no sound he makes The pain is now lessened - ready to cease and death finally comes with it's comforting peace And while the innocent pays for the sins of another back to the streets walks his cocaine mother... |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
This is a very intense topic. You expressed it wonderfully. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
You did an amazing job on this.....the imigery although intense was excellent. Well done ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Chilling...an important message is in these words. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
yes I agree, a very important message. Well done ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed. Truly tragic. ------------------ Denise |
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Trynete Junior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 35Cape Cod, MA |
Wow, that just makes me want to cry, how was this inspired? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
profound....very well done.... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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S.Ford New Member
since 1999-09-16
Posts 4 |
sad....but beautifuly put |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very poignant message here, Echo. A sad and sometimes overlooked problem of society. At least here in California there have been some recent law changes to hold the mother accountable in situations like these {It should be like that everywhere}. Chilling, indeed. Michael |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
It has been here(IL.)Michael. If you are found to have drugs in your system the baby will be taken from you and you go to jail. This was a hard subject, you did a great job with it! You brought tears to my eyes! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Lucie, hoot_owl_rn, caroline, Dark Angel, dsnyder, S.Ford, WhtDove, Jay_Jay, and Toerag...Thank you for your comments. Trynete...This happened to my friends sister and it inspired me a lot. Michael...I live in California too, and yes I am grateful for the law change myself. This happened a couple years ago though and not in California either. ALL...I write poems to vent feelings, but this one I also wanted to get a message accross with as well. Thank you all for taking the time to read it! [This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 09-20-1999).] [This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 09-20-1999).] |
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Jay_Jay Junior Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 38San Diego, CA. USA |
WOW, Echo...Deep poem, with a good message. I cried ------------------ Never allow life to get in the way of living... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Wonderfully done, sad, true poem.... |
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Sean Junior Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 17Holtville, CA. USA |
Great poem Echo...tears once more in my eyes. You have brought a powerful message with this poem. |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
very vivid imagery you use here...wonderful poem |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Such a tragic story, so sad for the innocent. So lovingly told. ------------------ Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels. ~Isis~ |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you for your comments and taking the time out to read it. I appreciate it! |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
ouch. I was hoping for a happier ending. However, the world is not so. I guess nobody wins in the end. VERY good poem. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Powerful poem, hauntingly intense. You said it well without resorting to melodramatic tactics. The problem is one of so many that plague newborns today...alcohol babies are nearly as handicapped. You did a very admirable job with this piece. :-) Michael and Echo, where in California do you live? ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
That was a great poem. I hate to see someone innocent pay for the mistakes of another |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you all for your comments... beowulf_26...I wish I could have ended the poem happier, but I dont think it would have gotten the message through, and also this is a true strory and it didn't end happy, so, well, you know. Thank you for taking the time out to read my poem. Beki...You're right, alcohol babies are nearly as handicapped too, I have dealt with that many of times as well. As for where in Cali I live, I live in the Santa Clarita Valley, or as most people now us by, Magic Mountain. Thank you fot taking the time to read the poem. Systematic Decay...I hate to see someone innocent pay for another as well, and that is partially why this poem was written! Thank you for taking the time to read it! |
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Ayla Member
since 1999-08-31
Posts 50 |
Great but sad poem... ------------------ The heart is happiest when it beats for others.. |
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DBeth Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 110providence,ky.42450 |
It is so sad to see people suffer,especially the innocent young children.The world can be so cruel.What is real sad is that there are many,many women and couples that would give up everything they own to have a healthy baby.Yet,they are not able to have children of their own.Instead the ones that don't need them or (want them) have them everyday.Now that is sad.I'm truly sorry for your friend. But very nice poem,well written!! DBeth ------------------ When we give of ourselves whole heartedly,it comes back around ten fold. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
DBeth....I believe it is terribly sad to see people suffer,especially the innocent young children as well. You're right, the world can be so cruel. So unfair in times...the majority of times. But I have high hopes and I hope that MAYBE I can do some small part by getting a message accross to other people who care and can make a difference. Thank you for taking the time to read an respond to this poem! |
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Sean Junior Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 17Holtville, CA. USA |
I went back and read this again, actually I have a few times. I love it, it is such a wonderful message! So I thought I would bring it back up to the top so others can read it cause it was getting pretty far down in the list! |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
wow, how sad. let me wipe away my tears. have you ever seen the movie "Losing Isiah"? this poem reminds me of it. ------------------ One touch of nature makes the whole world kin. -William Shakespeare |
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DBeth Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 110providence,ky.42450 |
Everyone needs to see this one again,let's not forget the children! To the TOP you go! DBeth ------------------ When we give of ourselves whole heartedly,it comes back around ten fold. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Twice I have read this now. Twice it brings tears to my eyes. A strong message, let's keep it here a little longer! |
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papabear Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 102Atlanta, GA |
WoW!!! Very moving..... I agree this must stay at the top for everyone to see.... |
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Jay_Jay Junior Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 38San Diego, CA. USA |
Yes, I agree with the others, this needs to go back up to the top for more people to read. It truly is a great message! So with he click of my mouse, I bring you back up to the top *click* |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is quite tragic,intense and powerful, and quite well written!! This is a very very important message!!! Back up to the top of the stack with ya!!! Justbleu  ------------------ "It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart" |
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