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BoyToy
Junior Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 23
everett, wa, usa

0 posted 1999-09-19 12:25 PM


Love me like no other
Touch me with your sex
Feed me your soul
Give me your self

Embrace me
Smother me
Caress me
Join me

Love me

© Copyright 1999 BoyToy - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 1999-09-19 02:00 PM


Boy toy....not sure why you didn't get any responses to this one. There are very few word, but the speak a lot. I myself would prefer to see one line changes in it though....instead of
Touch me with your sex
following the theme of the rest of the poem, I'd like to see
Touch me with your heart
Now that would be a poem!!!!

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

Pepper
Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
2 posted 1999-09-19 02:18 PM


very nice....thanks for sharing

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

BoyToy
Junior Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 23
everett, wa, usa
3 posted 1999-09-19 05:49 PM


to Hoot Owl
Poetry, like art, is in the eye of the beholder. Intimacy is a very important part of the love I was writting about, sorry to dissapoint you, >:-)

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 1999-09-19 05:53 PM


Laughs...no doubt and you are quite right, it is all in the eye of the beholder.......but I remain the born romantic.

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

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