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Antler Time

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Paul Allen Lupien
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0 posted 09-18-99 07:32 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

the hard-hatted sawers and choppers
demolished an ancient oak today
it was diseased and had to be put out of its misery
but it was a sad sight
so I shut my open door and sighed
and thought of all the cruelties of life
but from out of my open window
I viewed the gathering
of many manly men
who had appeared and from no good reason
they as stud deers snorting
in their ritual of show off
old bucks posing strong stanced
and I could smell the smell of the rutting
as they craved to display
their power
over a tree
they herded there waiting and hoping
to be a part of the destruction
IT WAS SAP-BLOOD-LUST IN THE STREET THIS DAY
as they loin joined
and all salivating
rushed to the ropes
gleefully seizing the chance to help
in the pulling down of life
all of them merging in the missing
of their long lost
antler time

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Isis
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1 posted 09-18-99 08:51 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Nicely done, I was worried they were going to be shot! Glad they weren't!:

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Paul Allen Lupien
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2 posted 09-18-99 09:10 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Actually,the "old bucks" were the "manly men"
who,trying to display their long lost virility,couldn't wait to help tearing down a tree.Their "antler time" refers to the long ago time of their sexual peak.A loss which,to them, is primary-just like an animal,specifically in this case,a deer.
Kind of a statement for the vapidity of current social values-particulaly,male ones.
Thanks for responding to this Isis.It is a rather difficult one to immediately assess.

PAL


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LngJhnAg
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3 posted 09-18-99 09:15 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Paul

Others might miss your point,
But its not been lost on me.
Antlers and 'Deer go together,
And he's lost his virility.

heh heh heh
Paul Allen Lupien
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4 posted 09-18-99 09:41 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Exactly!!!

Your verse was hilarious and highly apropos
they imagined their antlers of long years ago
they were trying to prove themselves by this ploy
Twas' a pitiful sight-one I didn't enjoy.


PAL




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Balladeer
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5 posted 09-18-99 09:52 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I'm afraid, Paul, you missed Long John's point.... but I didn't, you Long John scum!!!

I've still got enough virility to shove it, oh, hi there, sweet Nan, so nice to see you!

(later, Long John)


btw, excellent poem, Paul.
Paul Allen Lupien
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6 posted 09-18-99 10:50 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Oh really? Hmmm...

If "he" means me,
I have to laugh
(As truth would speak on my behalf)
I spoke of FALSE virility,
a softer way,one not for me.

(PAL?)

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