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My Sunny Day

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U K Hero
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0 posted 09-18-99 03:31 PM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for U K Hero

My Sunny Day

Do I love thee…?
If I a sunny day
Then you a flower be
Would you
For me
Your blossom Bloom,
Then me
For you
Of clouds
I shine them all away.

Would you love me?
If I
That flower
And you
A honey bee,
If so,
Then, for you my scent declare
And you, in meadow yonder
Will find my nectar there.

For I, would love thee
If I
That honey bee
Then I
In meadow fair
Would search for words to say
Will you
‘My sunny day’


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Nan
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Lovely...
Poet deVine
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Wow! I love this one! Has a singsong quality to it..very memorable!
hoot_owl_rn
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Beautifully written, the format works wonders with this piece

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Paul Allen Lupien
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I like your precision of language,your sense of flow and rather classical understatement.
Less is often more nez-pas?Also,the gentility of sentiment-restrained as matches the essential proffering of your attentions to your desired one.It all fits and works very well.

PAL

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sweet write
 
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