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What Does It Take To Bring Me Joy?
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What Does It Take To Bring Me Joy? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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What Does It Take To Bring Me Joy? I feel the sweet cessation, of my vapid peace draw near. The churning of my hatred, begins to cool me, not to sear. The malady of anger - foeman valiant who's now lost... A shard of lonely madness, still doth assail and accost. Kaleidoscopic feelings - are curious and unknown... Ever the anomalous, as we've fought we've also grown. Sagacious might - battles on, through a faux veneer of wit. "Obiter dictum," always; Too obsessive? Never quit! Narcissistic I'll admit; full of ego, that's my fault... Let it waver, let it fall, ‘neath the truth of your assault. Yearning and burning, (cliche) you have given, done your part. Yield game point, win to you, surely follow dost my heart! Obscure in verse it may seem, not too much for what we are. Unmerciful to my heart, you broke through, yet left no scar. . [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 09-17-99).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You amaze me christopher. I am ever in awe of the form you present so well. Lots of emotion in mind after this one. Michael |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow Christopher....what can I say? Only Wow....very very powerful....angry yet "wanting" all the same....wow. This really moved me although I'm still sitting here wondering what exactly I feel....a bit of anger & disappointment myself....hhmmm. Fabulous expression! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Christopher, a well put together, well worded piece! I really liked the... "Kaleidoscopic feelings." I think we all have those, but that was a great way to put it. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I loved the last two lines of this piece....very powerful!! ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have to agree with all, but especially Whtdove, as "Kaleidoscope feelings" caught my eye, and emotions, and I saw the colors... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I know that reading a well-written poem such as this one definitely brings me joy...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher, I agree with Nan. good job. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I agree with the others - this is really good. And to think, you were going to quit? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I want you all to know that your words really touched me! Especially the ones about my form! We all know that's not my strong suit! I went back, and edited the poem, bolding the first letters, in case you hadn't noticed... I really put some time in on this one, it took me almost an hour and a half to do! I appreciate and am humbled by your praise, though I take little credit for anything but the labour... my inspiration, she is the one whom should be thanked! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
You could feel this one. Truly well written. Nice work, Christopher. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Lord Christopher, maybe we should get Michael to join us in a drunken stupor and we can all sing Ballads in drunk's off key bellowing. Lovesick we all are, though I for one know what will cure mine. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
"A shard of lonely madness"...great line! I really liked this one!  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I dont need to be on top here, but a little help staying on the first page would be appreciated...I don't wnat "her" to miss it when she logs back on!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Far be it from me not to help true love prevail. Up you go, Christopher! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you sir... Up you go Chris |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
While I am helping keep you up here, may I say, this is GREAT (don't know how I missed it the first time 'round! I always look for your postings) ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
My dear. What could I possibly say to this? It is heart wrenching, and beautiful and I understand exactly how you feel. Thankyou for sharing this piece of your soul. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 09-19-99).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This isn't allowed to go, just yet. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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