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Something different and is it any good?

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Isis
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0 posted 09-17-99 01:12 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis


The lonliness coils around me like a snake,
It weaves around my being like a mist,
It shuts me off from the world,
It beats on my soul like a fist.

The quiet time of dusk does bring
Forth feelings of terror and fear,
A realization that indeed I'm alone.
I cry a single tear..

SHORT BUT A TOTAL EXPERIMENT FOR ME..

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


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Michael
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1 posted 09-17-99 01:22 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

It is short but it says much, Isis.
To convey that much emotion in so few words can only be a good thing.

Michael

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Poet deVine
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2 posted 09-17-99 01:34 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I love the first line! Very scary and graphic...loneliness (and snakes)scare me too!
Isis
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3 posted 09-17-99 01:40 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Thanks to the men of wisdom...:

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 09-17-99 09:46 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Not a wasted word amoung them and it speaks volumes with very few words

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
WhtDove
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5 posted 09-17-99 09:49 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Your experiment turned out well! Very well indeed!
Isis
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6 posted 09-17-99 06:49 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Thanks WhtDove, I feel so inexperienced, like a baby taking first steps here sometimes. I need the support and encouragement.
Thanks to one and all.

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


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