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johnt300
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since 1999-09-12
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san diego, ca.

0 posted 1999-09-16 11:50 PM


Countless Age


Countless age
Of ancient voice, your
Sorrow sifts our joy,
Our fear.

Ageless pose for history's sake,
Tragic eyes see only me, and
Hold me in that era old gaze.

Allow me the honor,
Of dreaming your
Dreamful pasts, from
Your time to mine,
Of passion lost and paradise found.

A sacred time you lived,
Feared God above, so
I wonder, will I prove our
Worth for you, this strange new age? if you
Dream with me?

Through song and verse alone,
Fruitful union,
Anonymous chant to beautiful Bach,
Sacred text to Milton's fervor,
Are we so remote?

Ancient voice from hills to sea to heaven
above,
Sightless souls, today they grow.
For us who see,
May only you,
Set us free.

© Copyright 1999 johnt300 - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 1999-09-17 12:14 PM


My God John, beautiful...take me back with you, I've always wanted to return to the days of yore...:

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-09-17 09:49 AM


Tyson,
This is a magical, mystical, beautiful piece. It's depths so hard to grasp at first. This part is classic, such well worded lines
"Ageless pose for history's sake,
Tragic eyes see only me, and
Hold me in that era old gaze."



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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

johnt300
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since 1999-09-12
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san diego, ca.
3 posted 1999-09-18 12:04 PM


Isis and Hoot,
Oh thank you both very much. I didn't expect replies like that for this one. I had problems with this one from the start but Liked some of the lines. Thanks for the encouragement. Much appreciated.
Tyson

caroline
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4 posted 1999-09-18 12:17 PM


Brilliant!! It definitely takes one on a journey. I REALLY like your work!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

johnt300
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since 1999-09-12
Posts 214
san diego, ca.
5 posted 1999-09-18 12:22 PM


Thank you, Caroline.
I'm glad this took you back. Exactly what I was going for. Thank you for your friendly response. Take care, now.
Tyson

Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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6 posted 1999-09-18 12:57 PM


Very nice - I read this at least three times - and I have to agree with Hoot on her choice of favorite lines....
Nancy

johnt300
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since 1999-09-12
Posts 214
san diego, ca.
7 posted 1999-09-18 01:01 PM


Thank you, Nan,
Glad you liked it. Glad you liked those lines, too. I actually thought those were the most out of place for some reason. I guess I was wrong. Thank you.
Tyson

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