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Wendy
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0 posted 09-16-99 04:20 PM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

You see without blinking,
An allanthus bowing it's
Chinese roots;
A logical tree,
Blooming it's compound traits
In fruity dangling adolesence.

I see with squinting gaze,
A tree of heaven,
The branches a chorus of angels
Beckoning upward,
Outstretched, euphoric.
The trunk is the lean sinew of a runner,
Bark rippling in perfection.

Where you acknowledge industry
In the poppy, from the back-alley
Opiates to the crusty aromatic ovens,
I glimpse faery torches in the blossom,
Seductiveness in the spores,
The flame of sunsets in the petals.

The wide-eyed spook of camoflauge
On a butterfly's span,
Is nature thinking aloud,
You state defensively.
But why not a gaudy french brocade,
Showy enough for a spoiled monarch?

While you seek reason in the cosmos,
I will contentedly sit beside you
And trace patterns in the stars.
© Copyright 1999 Wendy - All Rights Reserved
Beki
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1 posted 09-16-99 04:26 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

This is an amazing poem, a very fresh way of looking at the differences between two people and how they experience the world. I especially liked the images:
"Blooming it's compound traits
In fruity dangling adolesence."
"The trunk is the lean sinew of a runner,
Bark rippling in perfection."
" from the back-alley
Opiates to the crusty aromatic ovens,"
" faery torches in the blossom,
Seductiveness in the spores,
The flame of sunsets in the petals."
And th eending is perfect. This is one of the best poems I have ever read online. Brava!

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
Nan
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2 posted 09-16-99 04:53 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

'Tis Symbiosis, my dear friend....
hoot_owl_rn
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Wonderfully written.....I absolutely had to read it with a title like that. Great job!

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Wendy
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4 posted 09-20-1999 03:35 PM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

Thanks all for your comments on this one. I am especially fond of it, attempting to describe how logistical mixed with creative can make a good match. :-)
 
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