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Two Kindred Spirits ( a haiku sequence)

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Beki
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Two Kindred Spirits

Two kindred spirits
Divided by one ocean -
Warm winds trade kisses

Kisses of summer
wrapped up in pink paper
The bow in her hair

Hair flowing like water
across her bare shoulders
to tickle his hands

Hands like fine leather
That touch her like velvet
and stop her sweet breath

Breath of the nightwind
That whispers to lovers
drawing them closer

Closer then skin is
he murmers his passion
against cheeks of satin

Satin and leather
they burn there together
desire unfettered

Unfettered as eagles
they soar into heaven
on bright wings of love

Love carries them with it
to conquer the ocean
Two kindred spirits.

Beki (1999)

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
© Copyright 1999 Rebecca Reese - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 09-16-99 04:20 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

You have a talent! I have enjoyed your works that I have read.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Iloveit
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2 posted 09-16-99 04:44 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

*sigh* yep that you do, that is beautiful, I don't have an ocean to conquere but your poem reminds me much of my hearts desire, who, btw, sometimes wears leather and I would rise and grow wings to be with in a heart beat

and o&o you shush!
doreen peri
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3 posted 09-16-99 04:55 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Nice to see you over here, Beki! I remember you from another forum....

this is a wonderful use of haiku... using the haiku as a stanza in a narrative type poem... each of the last words, the first words of the next haiku/stanza.... i really think you've done a great job with this!

Looking forward to seeing you post more here, more often.

-dp
Nan
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4 posted 09-16-99 04:58 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Very nice, indeed - I like your sequential flow and the contiguity of the work as a whole - Keep 'em coming...
and, btw
May I extend you an Open Welcome to the Forums...



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Iloveit
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ok beki, now I am jealous, I didn't get a butterfly kissed hello from nan....sheesh...

of course I am not half the poet you are, but, I sure like it here

and nan, don't mind me, I am just kidding, just complimenting beki again, I already made myself at home while you were away
Beki
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6 posted 09-16-99 07:12 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Thanks everyone...Doreen, I remember you too, from Arcanum perhaps? Nan thanks for the beautiful welcome...and Iloveit....I really do appreciate all your nice comments. yep, I am defintiely going to like it here :-)

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
hoot_owl_rn
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Very nice...but a few of the stanzas do not fall into the haiku format of 5/7/5 syllable count

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Beki
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8 posted 09-16-99 08:45 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Hoot....all haiku does not fall into the traditional 5-7-5......in fact there is a whole school of thought that believes because of the differences between our languages (Japanese and English) that 17 syllables in Japanese would translate more correctly into English as 13-14 syllables. Haiku is my spec-i-al-i-ty (studied it extensively for two years before I ever tried to write it)and when I was getting rejected for writing traditional haiku because they were too long I learned how to write them shorter too.I used both forms in this sequence.Thanks for reading :-)

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society

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Master
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9 posted 09-16-99 08:50 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Haiku Master Beki! I'm not a very big fan of this style but this was wonderful. I'm going to have to add that one to my favorites as well as the other poem.

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I fell in love and kept on falling
Paul Allen Lupien
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10 posted 09-17-99 12:30 AM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Sensual,lovely,imaginative,gentle,passionate,

beautiful


PAL

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Beki
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Thank you Paul, I recall admiring some of your work at arcanum......nice to see you here. :-)

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
Michael
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12 posted 09-17-99 03:52 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Very well written, Beki,
very moving as well.
Beautiful.

Michael

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Beki
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13 posted 09-18-99 04:41 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Thank you very much Michael..it was an experiment in linked verse but I think it turned out rather well..:-)
 
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