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Finality

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hoot_owl_rn
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Finality

Words
that should have been said,
no longer needed.
Tears
once shed as if in mourning,
now dry.
Bands
that symbolized eternity,
lie at the bottom of a jewelry box...
hidden from site.
Pictures
packed in a dusty box,
are all that show
that “we” once were.
It would be so much easier,
if I could bury my feelings
like we bury our dead.

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 09-15-99 08:20 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

In so few words you really gave me a sense of loss and 'finality'. Such a devastating topic, but very well written, Hoot.
WhtDove
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2 posted 09-15-99 08:28 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I like that last line there. If only we could bury those hurts like that. Great job!!
susieQ_luccier
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3 posted 09-15-99 09:16 PM       View Profile for susieQ_luccier   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for susieQ_luccier

I realy felt something when i read this. thank you hoot,Its wonderful written!
Denise
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4 posted 09-15-99 09:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well written Hoot!

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Denise

[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 09-15-99).]
hoot_owl_rn
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Severn, Susie, Whtdove and Denise......thank you all very much for your kind words

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
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6 posted 09-15-99 10:37 PM       View Profile for beowulf_26   Email beowulf_26   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for beowulf_26

*whew* Very powerful. I definetly liked the closing line. Another clever spot was the "hidden from site". You truly have much talent and I'm grateful to be able to read your work.

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Pepper
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few words with such an impact....Hoot, your talent shines so...I always search you out knowing .......

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8 posted 09-15-99 10:51 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Such sadness in your poetry, hoot......
Seymour Tabin
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Hoot,
You express your sadness to well.
reading it has made me sad as well. *L*
hoot_owl_rn
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Balladeer....yes, there usually is......someday there will be much better things to write about

Pepper....thank you for those words of praise

Bewulf....thanks, you are far too kind

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
doreen peri
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whoa! I've been *there* before! But my band went flying out of the car window on rte 495, 75 mph...never looked back to try to find it...if you know what i mean....

hey and yeah i *did* bury my feelings like you bury the dead and you know what? you can, too.

thanks for sharing this, rn
johnt300
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12 posted 09-16-99 07:52 PM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Hoot,
I'm sorry I didn't get to this one sooner. A deep sense of loss, with an undertone of determination to start over fresh. Very tough. Thanks.
Tyson
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I like the opener -
"words that should have been said/no longer needed"
Ya know, after awhile, there's just nothing left to say - and no reason to bother....
Andrew Scott
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Yes it would. Although it has made for some great poetry, and this is no exception ,I hope one day you will be pain free. As always, you have my best wishes.
hoot_owl_rn
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Doreen Nan and John, thank you all

Andrew, you are a dear......thanks

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
caroline
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16 posted 09-16-99 09:09 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

hoot...this is describing what I, too, am going through. Thank you. I haven't been able to put it so eloquently as you have. Hugs to you.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Isis
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17 posted 09-16-99 09:32 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Lovely, but to bury one's feelings would leave one bereft of all emotion, you wouldn't really want that. But I know what you mean!:

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


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this is close to home for me
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