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I looked back

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 09-15-99 02:53 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

I looked back

And dry rot ate the steps of wood
In all the places I had stood.
And brambles pad the path and yard
Abandon hangs a sad facade.

Uncaring rode the moon on high
Uncertain seemed the wind to cry
And the silent trees snaked shade
Like painted Halloween brocade.

Haphazard hung the cobweb frills
With hollow eyes and empty sills
And only sorrow gorged my glean
On mockery that filled the scene.

Dissolved in sipping simple truth
Past relics of my naive youth
And queasy load my ducts with tears
And heavy grew the weight of years.

What is, has been, cannot again
No matter the Zen or amen.
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1 posted 09-15-99 03:25 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Now we know why it is better that one not look back.

Well, well done, Artful one!

Much liked!
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very well done, love that last stanza, perfect ending!
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3 posted 09-15-99 05:10 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very good, Seymour. Very vivid. Very familiar scene. As always, it's been a pleasure.




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Nan
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Sy - Have I told you recently that you're awesome??
Isis
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5 posted 09-15-99 06:20 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Like Nan said you are awesome, but perhaps that word was too weak?
Amazing etc....I loved it..

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Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 09-15-99 11:39 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sunshine, ILoveit, Dsnyder, Nan and Isis,
I am not neglecting my answer just didn't have a chance to get back to this one.
You all do me honor and I love you all.
 
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