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Open Poetry #2

I looked back

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 1999-09-15 02:53 PM

I looked back

And dry rot ate the steps of wood
In all the places I had stood.
And brambles pad the path and yard
Abandon hangs a sad facade.

Uncaring rode the moon on high
Uncertain seemed the wind to cry
And the silent trees snaked shade
Like painted Halloween brocade.

Haphazard hung the cobweb frills
With hollow eyes and empty sills
And only sorrow gorged my glean
On mockery that filled the scene.

Dissolved in sipping simple truth
Past relics of my naive youth
And queasy load my ducts with tears
And heavy grew the weight of years.

What is, has been, cannot again
No matter the Zen or amen.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 1999-09-15 03:25 PM

Now we know why it is better that one not look back.

Well, well done, Artful one!

Much liked!

Iloveit
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 1121
NM

2 posted 1999-09-15 03:34 PM

very well done, love that last stanza, perfect ending!

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 1999-09-15 05:10 PM

Very good, Seymour. Very vivid. Very familiar scene. As always, it's been a pleasure.

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Denise

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 1999-09-15 06:15 PM

Sy - Have I told you recently that you're awesome??

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

5 posted 1999-09-15 06:20 PM

Like Nan said you are awesome, but perhaps that word was too weak?
Amazing etc....I loved it..

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 1999-09-15 11:39 PM

Sunshine, ILoveit, Dsnyder, Nan and Isis,
I am not neglecting my answer just didn't have a chance to get back to this one.
You all do me honor and I love you all.

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