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Twilight

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Severn
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0 posted 09-15-99 12:16 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

So long have I walked these dusky shores
that Twilight has forgotten I am here
She breathes her chill night air
softly, exhaling the heat of day
and I catch a taste of it
I taste the sun, a flower, a lover's kiss,
the tang of light and airy places
sharp upon my lips
and I walk on, alone with only stars
to light my way, to call me home
yet Twilight holds me closely
nestling me by her side, unknowing,
hemming me in with threads
of dark oceanic despair:
the waves have lost their hope
white spray without a sunny touch
and Twilight only, with her distant closeness
spreads her shadows over us
the deep and I, united in our loneliness

10.9.99


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'Only the shallow know themselves.' Oscar Wilde.
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
johnt300
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1 posted 09-15-99 12:21 AM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Oh, very nice. Sounds like a solitary night alone, good or bad. Sometimes they help. Thanks.
Tyson
Severn
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2 posted 09-15-99 12:51 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thanks! Solitary is the operative word, indeed!
Christopher
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3 posted 09-15-99 01:59 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

And you tell me I'm the one who writes with no hope!
Bad girl!
Well written Severn, a pang of "loneliness," that meld with the solitude.

Ps, if you ever feel too alone, call me, and I'll lend you one or two of my "voices." They sure do help prevent the feeling of being alone!
Christopher
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4 posted 09-17-99 03:59 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Back to the top we go!

I was thinking about the feeling of desolation tonight, (sigh,) and it reminded me of this. So back we go, to commiserate with all the others who are feeling alone tonight.
(this is beginning to sound like a bad country song...)
juanita
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5 posted 09-17-99 03:16 PM       View Profile for juanita   Email juanita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juanita

You have great imagery in this poem, I
feel like going to the beach and just sitting
there contamplating the sea.
good work!
Artur Hawkwing
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6 posted 09-17-99 05:47 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

Perfection. I don't think Twilight could be described better than this.
Julie
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7 posted 09-17-99 06:12 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Beautifully done. Makes one (almost) look
forward to nightfall.

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Julie
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..."to thine own self be true."
>William Shakespeare



Paul Allen Lupien
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8 posted 09-18-99 12:12 AM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Very well worked analogy,between last and next.A suspension of action,a relection at a mid-point with effective imagery-both physical,mental and emotional.In my book that makes a poem.
Thanks for making it.

PAL

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passing shadows
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I can relate, even now
 
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