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redwriter1
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0 posted 09-15-99 12:14 AM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for redwriter1

I won't ever be
as young as I am now
If I could just remember how it felt
yesterday when I was young
so sure of myself
everything I wanted was in order
on the shelf

I had dreams packed away in boxes
took them out just to check
that they were there
I've got dreams like everyone else does
I just didn't let them out
in case they failed

I never thought about it much
til I saw an empty shelf
lined with empty boxes
like there was nothing left

I said, "where are all your dreams"?
"you can't give up now, not you"
He said, " I fill them everyday"
"cause all the rest came true"

Cause I won't ever be
as young as I am now
I wanna remember how it felt
when I was young and sure of myself
so i'm leavin this world
with an empty shelf.

(smile)
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Severn
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1 posted 09-15-99 12:19 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Very nice! A title? 'Full life'?, 'Empty shelf'? Something like that?
redwriter1
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2 posted 09-15-99 12:22 AM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

guess i'm trying to think of another way to say.. a "full life" is sometimes represented not by what we leave behind.. but.. how we didn't waste anything..like dreams, hopes and wishes..

geesh that's no help at all is it? hahah
Justbleu
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3 posted 09-15-99 12:28 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Hmm...Nothing Left Behind???

I don't know!!

If I think of something good, I'll send it your way!!

Nice poem...quite positive!!

Justbleu



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"Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???"
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


4 posted 09-15-99 02:03 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I too will try to think of something.
This one kind of surprised me, because when I first started reading, I thought it would be about wasted time, only to find that empty in this case didn't mean empty!

redwriter1
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5 posted 09-15-99 07:29 AM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

thanks for trying, I'm still thinking too (smile)
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on the threshold of a dream


6 posted 09-15-99 09:27 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

An empty shelf surely gave him a full life... great job!
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