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Lucie
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0 posted 1999-09-14 06:21 PM


Butterfly kisses upon your brow
the only affection I can allow.
As you lie there in eternal slumber
do you feel my pain .. I wonder.

I am forced to remain behind
all alone.. my own way to find.
A life we shared, two hearts as one
I was your mom, you were my son.

How can I be forced to live
without the tender touch you give.
Your sound of laughter in the air
you and I ….the perfect pair.

I thought I’d be the first to die
this can’t be true, must be a lie.
He was a child I scream out loud
him dying first shouldn’t be allowed.

Just one more kiss before I go
and this one thing I hope you know.
Mommy loves you little man,
now go with Jesus, hold his hand.

ps. I wrote this for a friend.


[This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-14-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 1999-09-14 06:28 PM


Ohhhh Lucie...how this makes my heart ache for any mother who faces the death of her child. You've penned this with true beauty. Thank you.

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Andrew Scott
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2 posted 1999-09-14 06:33 PM


Lucie: A good friend you were to give such a tribute. An honor was bestowed to you both. I bow to you and yours.
Tara Simms
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3 posted 1999-09-14 06:43 PM


Lucie, that was beautiful. A very dear friend of mine lost her son last month. He was 27 and expecting his first child. It's been very difficult for her and I'd love to share this poem with her.
Lucie
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4 posted 1999-09-14 06:45 PM


I would be honored Tara!

Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-09-14 07:32 PM


Beautiful, Lucie. An excellent poem on a heart-wrenching subject.
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6 posted 1999-09-14 07:39 PM


I can't imagine anything more agonizing than the loss of a child... regardless of that child's age. My mother was 49 when she died... and my grandmother had already buried her parents, siblings, and a husband. But I'll never forget her cry that she should have gone first. You wrote a beautiful poem for your friend, Lucie... well done.
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7 posted 1999-09-14 08:01 PM


Lucie, this is a wonderful poem and you were a wonderful friend to write it. It's so sad, and it's unfair that these things happen. But you said it well.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


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8 posted 1999-09-14 09:10 PM


Oh my, my heart goes out to your friend.
Very emotional, heartwrenching piece. Well done Lucie.

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Denise

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9 posted 1999-09-15 04:10 AM


You captured the emotion of the situation well!!! I hope your friend is doing ok!!

Thanks!!

Justbleu

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JTF
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10 posted 1999-09-15 04:45 AM


Lucie, you made me cry ... but it's beautiful ... thank you for sharing it !
Christopher
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11 posted 1999-09-15 04:51 AM



Condolences to your friend.
Well written Lucie.
Was it hard to do?

~one voice~
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12 posted 1999-09-15 05:10 AM


Lucie... I'm sitting here in tears now... A mother myself, I cannot fathom this pain. I feel for your friend immensely.... God Bless her and help her to move on...

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."



RainbowGirl
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13 posted 1999-09-15 05:19 AM


Big hugs for your friend Lucie



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Lucie
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14 posted 1999-09-15 10:39 AM


Thank you all for your replies.

Christopher, it was nothing compared to what she went through.

Iloveit
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15 posted 1999-09-15 10:44 AM


lucie, you wrote about a subject I don't even want to think about, and handled it very well, very beautiful, I could feel the love and the pain....it made me want to cry and hug you at the same time, great writing!
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16 posted 1999-09-15 10:47 AM


Another great one gal.....Here...have an apple!!!
Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 1999-09-15 11:18 AM


Lucie,
Your mood is somber with sorrow.
A tear, a frown, a sad embrace.
I would that you tomorrow.
Place a smile upon your face.

A wonderful poem.

WhtDove
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18 posted 1999-09-15 11:29 AM


Lucie, absolultely beatuiful poem! It's very sad. I being a mother hope to never go through that. What a friend you are! My heart goes out to your friend.
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19 posted 1999-09-15 07:19 PM


Lucie...this brought tears to my eyes. I can not imagine how it must feel to watch your child die. What a nice thing to write for your friend and I'm sure it expressed her feeling quite well.

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

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