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Holding Back (a repost by request from a while back)
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Holding Back (a repost by request from a while back) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Holding Back I will never again give myself wholly to another even as I lay, languishing in your arms our bodies still damp with sweat, naked, as the sun rises in the red morning sky part of me will always hold back Yes, those three words may pass my lips like the sighs that passes over them moments and hours before when I cried out your name in ecstasy and I may even mean what I say, when I say them but there will be a part of me holding back for to give you all of me would be to lose a part of myself Yes, perhaps someday as we drink tequila on a sandy beach in Mexico, watching the sky turn from blue to orange beneath the setting sun I will tell you all of this and more and maybe I will be surprised to find that you too are holding back As we reach the bottom of the bottle drinking to where only the worm remains when everything we've wanted to say, has been said 'till we've convinced ourselves as well as each other that we have nothing to lose by holding back maybe, just maybe, it won't be so hard to swallow ------------------ "This world is not conclusion. A sequel stands beyond, Invisable as music, But positive as sound." ~Emily Dickinson |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Wow...I like it ...so vivid. ------------------ Helewes |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
This rocks Hoot!! ------------------ Pain is life, life is short, I will endure. DreamEvil© |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Jenny and Dream, thank you both so very much for your kind words. I can't say that I agree so much with this philosphy as I did a few months ago when I wrote it, but then again...I'm not in that position yet either. ------------------ "This world is not conclusion. A sequel stands beyond, Invisable as music, But positive as sound." ~Emily Dickinson |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Especially liked the "worm in the bottle" part and the "blue to orange sky" is effective also. good one... PAL ------------------ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Paul...thank you very much for your comments ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
This is awesome hoot...glad you reposted it, for I missed it the first go 'round. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Thanks for the repost. I'm glad I'm catching up on so much great work that I've missed. You all (especially you hoot) have such great talent. Don't ever stop writing. I won't stop listening. ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another great one, Hoot!  ------------------ Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I have to echo everyone else here - this is great! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Everyone thank you so much for your kind comments. Bewulf...what a kind thing to say, your opinion of my writing may be a bit over rated, but thank you for your support ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I don't think here opinion of your work is over rated. Actually I agree with it Hoot. Great job...but the worm? eewww! Don't think I could ever swallow that. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whtdove.....actually the worm is used a symbolizm, I never actually said they were going to swallow the worm, in fact what they need to swallow is the fact that they believe they've nothing to lose by holding back ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Very original..fresh take on an old problem with many relationships. I think you explored it very well here! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Hoot:..I liked the emphasis on holding back or not...but if it's not in your nature to hold back, it's virtually impossible to do so.. HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you Beki and Rainbow girl.....I can't say as I posess the same attitude today as I did when I wrote this, but I think in some extent, we all hold back just a little ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Hi Ruth, I just reread this one and it is way up there as one of my favorites. I also realized I never left a note of thanks for sharing this one with us all. I guess it got lost in the workday shuffle. Excellent poem. Really. Take care. Tyson |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
excellent Hoot............ ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Tyson and Pepper, thank you both for your kind words ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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