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Holding Back (a repost by request from a while back)

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hoot_owl_rn
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Holding Back

I will never again
give myself wholly to another
even as I lay, languishing in your arms
our bodies still damp with sweat,
naked, as the sun rises in the red morning sky
part of me will always hold back

Yes, those three words may pass my lips
like the sighs that passes over them
moments and hours before
when I cried out your name in ecstasy
and I may even mean what I say, when I say them
but there will be a part of me holding back
for to give you all of me
would be to lose a part of myself

Yes, perhaps someday
as we drink tequila on a sandy beach
in Mexico, watching the sky turn from blue
to orange beneath the setting sun
I will tell you all of this and more
and maybe I will be surprised to find
that you too are holding back

As we reach the bottom of the bottle
drinking to where only the worm remains
when everything we've wanted to say, has been said
'till we've convinced ourselves as well as each other
that we have nothing to lose by holding back
maybe, just maybe, it won't be so hard to swallow

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"This world is not conclusion.
A sequel stands beyond,
Invisable as music,
But positive as sound."
~Emily Dickinson
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
JennyLee
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1 posted 09-14-99 10:08 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Wow...I like it ...so vivid.

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Helewes
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2 posted 09-14-99 10:09 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

This rocks Hoot!!

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
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hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 09-14-99 10:12 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Jenny and Dream, thank you both so very much for your kind words. I can't say that I agree so much with this philosphy as I did a few months ago when I wrote it, but then again...I'm not in that position yet either.

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"This world is not conclusion.
A sequel stands beyond,
Invisable as music,
But positive as sound."
~Emily Dickinson
Paul Allen Lupien
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4 posted 09-14-99 10:36 AM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Especially liked the "worm in the bottle" part and the "blue to orange sky" is effective also.

good one...

PAL

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hoot_owl_rn
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Paul...thank you very much for your comments

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
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6 posted 09-14-99 07:12 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

This is awesome hoot...glad you reposted it, for I missed it the first go 'round.

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beowulf_26
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7 posted 09-14-99 07:18 PM       View Profile for beowulf_26   Email beowulf_26   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for beowulf_26

Thanks for the repost. I'm glad I'm catching up on so much great work that I've missed. You all (especially you hoot) have such great talent. Don't ever stop writing. I won't stop listening.

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8 posted 09-14-99 10:21 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Another great one, Hoot!

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Denise
Severn
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9 posted 09-14-99 11:22 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I have to echo everyone else here - this is great!
hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 09-15-99 12:38 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Everyone thank you so much for your kind comments.

Bewulf...what a kind thing to say, your opinion of my writing may be a bit over rated, but thank you for your support

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
WhtDove
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I don't think here opinion of your work is over rated. Actually I agree with it Hoot. Great job...but the worm? eewww! Don't think I could ever swallow that.
hoot_owl_rn
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Whtdove.....actually the worm is used a symbolizm, I never actually said they were going to swallow the worm, in fact what they need to swallow is the fact that they believe they've nothing to lose by holding back

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Beki
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13 posted 09-18-99 04:51 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Very original..fresh take on an old problem with many relationships. I think you explored it very well here!
RainbowGirl
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14 posted 09-18-99 05:50 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Hoot:..I liked the emphasis on holding back or not...but if it's not in your nature to hold back, it's virtually impossible to do so..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

hoot_owl_rn
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Thank you Beki and Rainbow girl.....I can't say as I posess the same attitude today as I did when I wrote this, but I think in some extent, we all hold back just a little

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
johnt300
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16 posted 09-21-1999 06:16 AM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Hi Ruth,
I just reread this one and it is way up there as one of my favorites. I also realized I never left a note of thanks for sharing this one with us all. I guess it got lost in the workday shuffle. Excellent poem. Really. Take care.
Tyson
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excellent Hoot............

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
hoot_owl_rn
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Tyson and Pepper, thank you both for your kind words

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
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