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Master
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0 posted 1999-09-13 10:27 PM


I cherish you Fall; you’re my love and my curse
I’m dying of thirst; my fatigue pays its toll
I beg you, don’t stall, order clouds to burst,
I will crawl to the puddles to fill up my soul

Here you stand on the edge, facing your fate
And the time will not wait, turning over the page
It will set off the change, not a second delayed,
Immature at your age you will vacate the stage

Drop by drop, leaf by leaf, you are closer to snow
I observe you in awe, with a great disbelief,
Not a wrinkle of grief even though you must go
And with less time to breathe only higher you heave

Only higher you rise in a whirlpool of leaves
While nature’s striptease attracts all the eyes
And you flee in disguise while nobody sees
Then you cease to exist slowly shrinking in size


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I fell in love and kept on falling

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 09-14-99).]

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caroline
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1 posted 1999-09-13 10:33 PM


Master this is quite beautiful. The imagery is outstanding I enjoyed it much.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Master
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2 posted 1999-09-13 11:07 PM


Thanks Caroline, I'm glad you liked it.
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 1999-09-14 09:32 AM


All I can say is this is a very well written piece. The images you have created with your words are fantastic. Fall happens to be my favorite of all seasons

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"This world is not conclusion.
A sequel stands beyond,
Invisable as music,
But positive as sound."
~Emily Dickinson

Master
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4 posted 1999-09-14 03:01 PM


Mine too, hoot! Thanks for responding!

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I fell in love and kept on falling

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 1999-09-14 03:34 PM


Master,
Enjoyed the read.

Master
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6 posted 1999-09-14 07:24 PM


THanks Seymore, glad you liked it.
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7 posted 1999-09-14 08:08 PM


I like fall and winter best myself, Master! You have captured it so well in another fantastic piece.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


Master
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8 posted 1999-09-14 08:49 PM


Fall is also my favorite season, thanks Elizabeth!
Master
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9 posted 1999-09-14 10:20 PM


I've edited it a bit, what do you think?
Justbleu
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10 posted 1999-09-15 01:22 PM


I really enjoyed that!!! The imagary was beautiful!! Autumn is my favorite season!!
Nice poem!!

Thanks

Justbleu

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Pepper
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11 posted 1999-09-15 01:30 PM


yes, very beautiful imagery indeed Master.....here in south Florida there really is no Autumn, so thanks for the lovely picture.........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Master
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12 posted 1999-09-15 03:06 PM


Thanks Justbleu! Autumn is my fav season also.
Pepper, I'm glad you liked it. Here in NY Autumn is beautiful, I love this kind of weather. Thanks for your comments.

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I fell in love and kept on falling

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