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don't go in my closet

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Iloveit
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0 posted 09-13-99 06:54 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Iloveit

don't go in my closet

the distance between he and I is so great that
I can hardly see him anymore
"don't go in my bathroom, I don't like your ways"
I tiptoe around, not to disturb,
"don't go into my closet, I have my things just so,"
and I ask how can this be, these feelings from my partner for life?
"sshhh, don't talk, I have a headache"
I retreat making the distance one step further,
step by step, to the point where our love is now unreachable,
my heart, my body--untouchable.

but you have found the way to me, my distant love
the span between you and I is negligible,
miles of dirt do not change how intensely I can feel you next to me
"come into my life, I will give you love"
cautiously I offer my hand
"talk to me, permit me inside your beautiful heart and mind?"
I write, giving you entrance where no one has cared to be
I open my soul for you to see
word by word, thought by thought, I find you closer, until
totally yielding and entirely touchable
I can feel the warmth, the heat of your love,
across the miles I feel your passionate embrace.


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Saxoness
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1 posted 09-13-99 06:57 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

this is a good un, liked it lots

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Andrew Scott
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2 posted 09-13-99 06:58 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

An interesting approach. I've been married for over six years and still there are things that I'm still territorial about. I liked how it came together in the end and I thought this was a good title.
Iloveit
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3 posted 09-13-99 07:10 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

thanks guys, I wrote this one a while back, but the marriage hasn't improved, we still shut each other out
Andrew Scott
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4 posted 09-13-99 07:18 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sorry to hear about the lack of improvement. I should have pointed out that the only thing I'm really territorial over is my toothbrush and my books. Best of luck on you end. And thanks for looking in on my own.
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