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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
I will forget her though her taste is still upon my lips and her voice speaks within me, her touch as upon my skin and her passion,as it was, with all its so sweet demanding urgings, vivid,recent pleadings before the satiations which we knew with fingers probing now the solitary air surrounding hollow spaces which she so briefly,nearly,filled and with the passings of the morrows, like layered dusty heapings of spade to grave burying deep her image,still yet warm, though so briefly so, as all that has lived- finally turned heat to cold- my heart to withdraw,withdraw, till at last withdrawn, closed up within itself, untouchable, like hers- I will have willed it to forget. ------------------ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Paul, Enjoyed the read nice job. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Paul Excellent - I liked the way you used repetition to convey even deeper emotions - not an easy task to carry off. But you did it quite well. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Paul very nicely done! Packed emotions! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Paul...a very heartfelt and emotion piece. Nicely done! ------------------ "This world is not conclusion. A sequel stands beyond, Invisable as music, But positive as sound." ~Emily Dickinson |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sorrowful yet lovely piece! Very well done! ------------------ Denise |
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