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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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I'm logging on - I hold my breath to see if you are there... to see if you have left for me a treasure anywhere... An e-mail, or a poem or a paragraph of love - my lover on the Internet sent to me - from above. My monitor, a window to the world in which you live - my heart an open vessel that is full & wants to give... To you - my love - true happiness, a feeling so complete - I've needed you, you've needed me however did we meet ?... I place my hand upon the screen and wish that I could feel your lips, your breath, your soft caress I know that you are real. I try to fight this feeling that you are just fantasy - - I've never had someone like you please give your "words" to me. Romantic verse with meter - rhyme, make love to me with prose... lull me into lover's sleep - Will I awake ? Who knows.... Please feel me reaching out to you my hand upon the screen - I long to touch you - hold you close and "feel" you in my dream. I think of you as someone who completes me through & through... from this day forth, with Cyber-love I give my "words" to you.......... ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I see that you can indeed "relate". Your words are well-written, chosen and spoken. ------------------ Pain is life, life is short, I will endure. DreamEvil© |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
PFF...your excellence is showing  This is really an outstanding poem. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nicely written Poet.......amazing how many relationships are formed online. ------------------ "The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another great one! ------------------ Denise |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! He's lucky to have such a talented, warm, loving woman!  |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Excellent Femme, this is well written and thought out. It flows beautifully! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Very nice indeed! Bravo, makes me think of my little romance online...my sentiments exactly! ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is good. I mean really good. I think that many of have the urge to put our hands on the screen in a effort to be closer to the person we are communicating with. Wonderful thoughts. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
dreamy...wonderfully written Pff...can identify with this..... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
PoetFemmeFatale, I agree with balladeer this is a really good one. One of your best. |
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Richard 33 Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 187glen easton, wv usa |
Wow what a poem! I'm speechless. I loved it!!!!!!!! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
ENCORE!!!! This was EXCELLENT pFF!!!!! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Thank you everyone - I'm glad to see you accepted this with open arms...I have met so many truly wonderful people in this forum, but one in particular has stolen my heart, for I am weak....  Thank you all again !------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Bravo !! So beautifully written !!! Who hasn't exactly felt this way.... MORE Poet !!! ------------------ Helewes |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Poet: Exquisite! HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How well you've captured that breathless anticipation of logging on... looking and hoping for a word that will make your day! I must admit, I'm guilty of touching my screen... wishing I could reach beyond it... Excellent job!! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
hey I am not feeling very wordy today, but this poem is perfect....so will just tag onto suthern's post and say ditto!! no really great portrayal of something so many of us live every day! |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
PFF : Superb and so true ... Lovey : you're not feeling very "hairy" today ? ... errr, wordy ... ooops, better run and duck ... LOL |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
yep, wordy/hairy....neither affects my aim, well that is unless my hair gets in my eyes and then I might hit something I wasn't aiming for *eg* so good think you ducked lol.... |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
PFF... What can I say that hasn't already been said? This piece is outstanding and so beautifully worded! I love it!!! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior." |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
What can I say? I am so humbled by all of your responses! So many of you are new poets to the forum, I've got many new names to learn! Whew! Talk about having your work cut out for you....I'd better get busy....! I knew many of you could relate to this sort of poem....we've all felt this way at one time or another. ****blowing many kisses!! Thanks again to each & every one of you !!! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautifully written and flowing...: Good luck with your cyber love...::: ------------------ Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels. ~Isis~ |
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Dean's Girl New Member
since 1999-09-14
Posts 2Weedsport,NY,USA |
Wow, just as I feel, and just as I spoke to Dean last evening. I touch my screen and can actually feel you! What a powerful feeling indeed. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
I was searching through the piles here at Passions for another piece by you and found this little gem. I sat there in awe just admiring the work. The words just flowed wonderfully. My hat is off to you. ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
PFF: Beautiful! As touching as one can be. Thanks for sharing. I echo all the above. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Femme, You've touched the screen and the hearts of many in the process. I can't truly express how much this one meant to me. Michael |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Truly wonderful, thank you poet ... somedays it is hard to keep the screen clear of fingerprints ... 10/8 ... |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
...Guess I wish I had some screen wipes ...ooopsHugs [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-16-99).] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Oh my goodness ... PFF, this is a gem ... truer words were never written ... there is nothing so romantic as falling head over heels in love with someone's mind (words, etc) before you've ever touched or even seen thier body ... course I could be biased, since it has happened to me too ... I wish the both of you the best of luck ... the man who has captured your attentions undoubtedly knows how lucky he is, so I won't remind him ... Really enjoyed the read ... thanks for sharing. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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