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suthern
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0 posted 09-12-99 06:35 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Read the ledger.
There’s no doubt
I’d do better
Checking out.
No one’s mother,
No one’s wife,
No one’s lover,
Empty life.
Marking time,
Passing through.
Doesn’t matter
What I do.
© Copyright 1999 suthern - All Rights Reserved
Craig
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1 posted 09-12-99 06:48 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

Nicely written and cleverly worded poem Suthern. The best poetry contains few words yet has a profound meaning, this poem for me falls into that category.

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Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.

Sue
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2 posted 09-12-99 06:55 PM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Love the poem - don't agree with the sentiment, it always matters what you do. You don't have to be related to someone to have an identity.
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3 posted 09-12-99 06:56 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

One of the great intangibles in life is what we do for others and what our lives mean to others, all of this happening without us even being aware of it. I'm sure your life touches and adds to many people's in a very positive way. There's a reason for all of us to be here...that's why we're here.
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4 posted 09-12-99 08:00 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

I relate only too well to this one...and the brevity of it emphasizes what you say. Good piece.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
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5 posted 09-12-99 08:07 PM       View Profile for Angel Rand   Email Angel Rand   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel Rand

Very nicely written Suthern!
But I don't agree with the sentiment. Every person is an end onto themself. What you do should be of paramount importance to YOU. To give happiness is to FEEL happiness.
Angel
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6 posted 09-12-99 08:09 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very good Suthern! So much message with so few words! Although I echo the above that we all matter! (But you know that!)

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Denise
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7 posted 09-13-99 04:44 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Auntie, I'm conceited enough to believe that you are my friend ... and you matter to me ...

Oooops, I a almost forgot ... very well written !
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8 posted 09-13-99 07:08 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you all... very much!

Jef: You betcha!
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9 posted 09-13-99 07:12 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

For The Beauty and the Friend
One can only imagine
Rewards this lady brings
Safe within a heart so true
Underneath she's just like us
The doubts and fears, lack of trust
Her smile I see before me
Endless times of giving
Reaching out with all she has
Never doubt this love for you!
Beauty true is held skin deep
Even when we sleep
Loving and giving
Loyalty and listening
Eternal friend, just had to say why I love you!

HUSG

Glad to see you smiling..

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-13-99).]
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Rainbow.....Ain't it the truth!!!
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11 posted 09-13-99 07:46 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Rainbow: Thank you for the lovely poem... even more for the friendship that prompted it! (But you misspelled my name... or is this about SOUTHERN belles in general? LOL) Great job!!!

Toe & RG: Thank you, dear friends!
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You know me Suthern, Always did give that little bit extra.....but as Toe says "Ain't it the truth!!!" ..

HUSG

ps: I did a little editing..

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

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13 posted 09-13-99 08:26 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Rainbow .. So true ... and a superb acrostic as well !
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well as always, better late than never, great writing!


a mother? a wife? if that were all there
were to life, the how do you explain me?(grin)
but that is not all there is to life
God uses you my friend, in different ways.
If friends were riches
you would be up there with the wealthy
(beaming big smiles at you my friend)
you matter my friend!
LngJhnAg
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15 posted 09-13-99 12:26 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Yeah, Belle - and don't forget - where would the blondes of the world be without their spokesperson?! Now - on to more technical aspects of your poem....

Upon reading the ledger did you not see,
All the things you've been to me?
Did you not see written there,
The times you've been so quick to care?

Did you not see in bright detail,
Your caring, which has never failed?
Upon its reading do you not recall,
The many times you've given your all?

Do you now think you may presume,
That we don't think you hung the moon?
You've shortchanged yourself if that's so,
Your wit and wisdom have helped us grow.

Though neither our mother nor our wife,
You touch us all with your life.
You say you've not riches to share?
You enrich us all by being here.

No. Belle. You're more than you admit,
You're a fine person and a good friend.
Just look in the column that says, "Credits,"
You're in the black as you've always been.


Belle - hang in there sweet lady. This will pass, and we all love ya.


[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 09-13-99).]
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16 posted 09-13-99 12:44 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

LJA: You skeered me there. *G* When you said on to more technical aspects of the poem, I just knew I was SOL... Me? What technical aspects? *G* (I do capitalize correctly... other than that... hunh? LOL.) Great poem, dear friend... thanks!

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LngJhnAg
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17 posted 09-13-99 12:56 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Belle

Though you may have villified me in the past (just to support that rascally scalawag), I've always read "friend" in the things you write. Have you thought about eating chocolate lately? I hear things look better after a Hershey's Almond Bar - lol.
Iloveit
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18 posted 09-13-99 01:06 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

ok, beautiful poem Lj, great tribute to a great lady!

big hugs my friend, and hey, if you hear a knock on your door, it will be me, and I will bring the hersheys bars, I think I could use a chocolate pick me up today too!
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19 posted 09-13-99 02:30 PM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

Hey, I like this one! In fact, I'd like to see it go on for about three more stanzas!
LngJhnAg
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20 posted 09-13-99 02:35 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

there is a safe harbor in our home
WhtDove
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21 posted 09-13-99 05:36 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Suthern, I hope your out of the pit soon!
I ditto LJA's poem there for you! You are worth more to us than words can say. You reach out and touch all of us with your words! You are more than you admit! Here's to happier days! I hope they come soon for you!!!!
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gawd! this breaks my heart
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23 posted 02-20-2011 06:33 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

You still come out way in the black in any audit.  I love your poem, Ruth, and I love Long John's response to it.  He nailed how I feel about you.

xoxoxo
Alison
 
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