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She is Here

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johnt300
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0 posted 09-12-99 11:50 AM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for johnt300

She is Here


I once cherished her, soft auburn hair,
Her remoteness around me, quietly,
Circling about me, reaching in,
Fond kiss to the soul,
Without a touch,
Without a trace.

A still thread broken,
A falling of
Long shelved emotion,
And explosions of bright spreading
Soft light around us,
Though she was blind to it.

An unanswered passion so deep,
A love lost to never capture,
A lost girl in the firefight of life.

Long ago, when we were young,
We voiced our love for the other,
I to her...
Yet her to me,
A crescendo of fragile lies,
Foundations so deep, long ago ties
That I could not see,
Nor understand.

A faded past of a fading bright star,
My once true love,
Wandering in and out,
Of this loud bellowing soul.

A soul mate,
Once and always,
Forever lost,
In a billowing sky of sharks,
To never reach land, again.
© Copyright 1999 johnt300 - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 09-12-99 11:59 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

John,
This is a very heartfelt and moving piece. I enjoy the style you use, free verse works very well for this piece. It flows with a life of its own capturing the reader in its wake. I especially liked these lines:
"Yet her to me,
A crescendo of fragile lies,
Foundations so deep, long ago ties
That I could not see,
Nor understand."
Wonderfully done!! Welcome to the group. I willl be looking forward to more from you!!!


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Poet deVine
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2 posted 09-12-99 12:03 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Absolutely lovely! Sad and haunting. You have a gift of imagery that is wonderful read! Welcome to the family!

caroline
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3 posted 09-12-99 01:18 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Oh my...this is very beautiful. I enjoyed reading this. Hope to see more of your work soon.

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Denise
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4 posted 09-12-99 01:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, indeed! Very lovely! I enjoyed this immensely!

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Denise
johnt300
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5 posted 09-12-99 07:16 PM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Thanks for the replies. I didn't get this much response when I posted it months ago at yahoo clubs. It is very rewarding to hear good things from good poets. Thanks again.
Tyson
Pepper
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since 08-19-99
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6 posted 09-12-99 09:23 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

so beautiful John and superbly written.....loved this piece...thank you for sharing...

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
johnt300
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7 posted 09-14-99 11:22 PM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Pepper,
Thank you very much. I really appreciate that. This is my favorite, I think. Thanks again.
Tyson
Justbleu
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8 posted 09-15-99 12:36 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Very touching poem...brought tears to my eyes!!

Welcome!!!

Justbleu

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johnt300
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9 posted 09-16-99 07:30 PM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Justbleu,
Thank you. I hate to bring tears to your eyes, but am glad it affected you to that extent. Bye now.
Tyson
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10 posted 04-23-2004 01:37 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

beautifully sad
johnt300
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11 posted 02-03-2005 10:19 AM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Thank you.
I just logged back on here after many years of being away.
Nice to see someone post a comment so long after.
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