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Wendy
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since 09-10-99
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0 posted 09-11-99 07:18 PM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

They stare at the birdie with haunted posture,
Starched men holding their collective breaths
Beneath waistcoat and cumberbund,
Willing themselves out of a fidget,
And praying the moustache wax won't melt
In this relentless noon sun.
The wives and daughters, cinched grim
In petticoat and cruel wire,
Dab at moisture clinging to lips
Like the steam of the china teacup.
Their mouths, strained at the corners,
Poised terse and ready for posterity.
In hushed sepia tones they record the moment,
In tintype later mouthed by the teething babe,
Generations of classical noses and chiseled jaws,
Of wearing someone else's eyes
Along with the hand-me-down lace.
It seems the all of history
Was awash in brown brick,
And wan desolate composures;
The family pearls strung like a noose,
The watch fob dangling like a hellish chain.
© Copyright 1999 Wendy - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 09-06-99
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1 posted 09-11-99 07:24 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Well written, but you make the whole era sound so dismal and fake. The times were happy only perhaps not the photography.
It would've been a wonderful time to be in the world........:

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


Paul Allen Lupien
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since 09-09-99
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Ferndale,Mi.USA


2 posted 09-11-99 07:50 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Yes,yes,yes! The poem has a unique vision,a perspective never quite seen before-worth writing and well written.The sepia mood is a real one and dark as it may be,it serves to remind us that our tiny "reality" is not absolute but that it is absolutely tied to a larger picture-linked to a forever past,we are the past of someone elses future-a sobering thought indeed which can enlarge ones own life-thought parameters.To me,this is a very good poem indeed.

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hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 09-11-99 08:09 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nicely done...wonderful use of imagery in this piece. I've had the pleasure of seeing some of these old, old photos of mambers of my family. Everyone bundled up in their, or someone elses, Sunday best to get their picture taken. Fake smiles plastered on weathered faces. I especially liked these last two lines
"The family pearls strung like a noose,
The watch fob dangling like a hellish chain."
Wonderful!!

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"The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin
Denise
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4 posted 09-11-99 08:12 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I enjoyed this Wendy. I have seen pictures like this from the past! You describe them very well, indeed!

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Denise
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5 posted 09-11-99 09:30 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I enjoy the entire poem but "willing themselves out of a fidget" really strikes me. So I'm strange......
Sunshine
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since 06-25-99
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Listening to every heart


6 posted 09-13-99 08:41 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Wendy, the ultimate compliment is that one of the other members, Savana, told me to go and read this poem of yours. And I am so glad she did. The attorney I work with is a re-enactor of the times you laid out so well in this piece...with your permission, I would like to give him a copy of this.

Well done, young lady.
Wendy
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since 09-10-99
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7 posted 09-13-99 11:05 AM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

Thank you for the compliment, and yes, of course you can use it! To get my full name, e-mail me at La2Lips@AOL.com :-)
Billy
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since 09-05-99
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8 posted 09-13-99 01:44 PM       View Profile for Billy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Billy

This one is flawless. Thank you for sharing it with us. You are very talented. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Michael
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since 08-13-99
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9 posted 09-17-99 10:35 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wonderful work, Wendy,
Glad I found my way back to this one.

Michael
Nan
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since 05-20-99
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10 posted 09-17-99 10:45 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm picturing "classic noses and chiseled jaws".... and yet another from the 2Lip one... C'mon back now, hear???
Wendy
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11 posted 09-20-1999 03:31 PM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

Thank you all for your kind words! This one has been ruminating around in my head for quite some time! :-)
 
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