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Lucie
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since 1999-06-20
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Houston

0 posted 1999-09-11 06:49 PM


*A challenge from Hoot to use the phrase...Everything is different, cause everything's the same.*

You came and sat beside me, with sadness in your eyes.
Eyes that look so much like mine from years of living lies.
As a child I remember the fights that you would have,
then us running to the basement hiding from my dad.

The years of verbal bashing and the bruises that you’d hide.
The looks from friends and family as you squeezed my hand and lied.
The simple acts of silence would enrage the beast in him.
When you tried hard to please him the fight would start again.

And now that I am married with children of my own
I’ve followed in your footsteps and gone with what I’ve known.
Different time and different place, different face and different name
everything is different, cause everything’s the same.


OK I need another challenge!!! Help!! hehe

[This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-11-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 1999-09-11 06:57 PM


You did well Lucie, nicely written and a very nice piece of work.

For everyone...her challange was to use the lines:
Everything is different, 'cause everything's the same

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"The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin

Lucie
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since 1999-06-20
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Houston
2 posted 1999-09-11 06:59 PM


Thank you Hoot, and thanks for the challenge.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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3 posted 1999-09-11 07:01 PM


I had to reply again Lucie after reading this for the third time...It is such a poignant piece...amazing how we do what we've been taught. Abuse is a vicious cycle. They say that children of abuse are far more likely to marry into an abusive marriage or be in an abusive relationship if not become the abusers themselves. I am teaching my children to break that cycle, that abuse isn't normal, isn't good. I was very touched by this piece.
Hugs
Ruth

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"The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 09-11-99).]

Lucie
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since 1999-06-20
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Houston
4 posted 1999-09-11 07:05 PM


Hoot, I have read many of your poems..and while I can not say that you influenced me in that way to write the topic here, you are right it does tend to be a cycle. When I read the phrase you gave me I had to repeat it several times to get the feel of it.. and it was sort of a cycle statement. I am glad it touched you and I am glad that you are teaching your children a different path to take. I am proud of you!
caroline
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since 1999-08-16
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5 posted 1999-09-11 09:09 PM


I am proud of both of you! Empowered ladies with strong voices, talent and the compassion to share it all with us
Great poem Lucie...quite moving.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
6 posted 1999-09-12 12:22 PM


Challenge met! Very Good!!!
Pufalove
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 119
Houston, Tx. USA
7 posted 1999-09-12 03:30 AM


As usual, you never cease to amaze me. Very good!
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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Southern Florida
8 posted 1999-09-12 09:49 AM


I echo Caroline.....Lucie, a challenge well met

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Elizabeth
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9 posted 1999-09-12 11:21 AM


You really met the challenge well, Lucie. The cycle was very well described.

Hey, Hoot-wanna challenge me now?

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."



[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 09-12-99).]

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
10 posted 1999-09-16 07:23 AM


Fine job there...I think you did well!!


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"Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???"
Justbleu


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