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The Jackal
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0 posted 09-11-99 01:33 PM       View Profile for The Jackal   Email The Jackal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Jackal

can you start to fear me
when my candle starts to fade
can you start to see me
when im burning baby
will i still make the same sound
as you light the match
and im soaked in gasoline
but you'll never hear my scream..
because our love was
never what it seemed




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Denise
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1 posted 09-11-99 01:54 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Another painful, tragic one. (not autobiographical, I hope). Well written though!

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2 posted 09-11-99 02:36 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

Very good. It was a little different than the others, it was hinting at self mockery, I think. Very blunt, I liked it.

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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

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3 posted 09-11-99 03:59 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

It was painful. You have said it well, Jackal.

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"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 09-11-99 06:20 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Tragic...sometimes nothing is what it seems at all...there is more unsaid in this poem that what is said, but it can be vividly read between the lines. Well done!

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