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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 1999-09-10 06:30 PM


i could almost run
i could almost hide
if only i found
the courage buried deep inside
but i lack it
i lack it all
im your fall guy
sucker to the end
the user's best friend
but just see if you
can catch me in the end
when i self implode
in the sky
i wont lie
i wasnt meant to be
living in self pity



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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 1999-09-11 10:37 PM


Very emotional piece - I like how you used lower case "i" for yourself....I did that once in a poem where I was feeling "small & helpless".....it tends to make the author seem that way.....great job !!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



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