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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 1999-09-10 12:00 PM





It was a cool, wet September day,
I could hear the river's gentle sound
smell the freshness of rain on the grass
see the willows swish against the ground

Evening crowded the late summer sky
as I entered the church that day
and though this was a sacred place
I hadn’t come here to pray.

I walked up the aisle reverently
no hymnal music guided my way
silently I stood at the alter
and found I had no words to say.

To the left was the granite tomb
and within lay the famous Bard
His words had always inspired me
and standing here hit me hard

Tears ran slowly down my cheeks
I was surprised to find them there
His presence in this room was great
magical verses resounded in the air

I’ve met a few celebrities
but they cannot hold a light
to the man, long dead, I encountered
in church, that September night.

© Copyright 1999 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 1999-09-10 12:30 PM


DeVine one, you are the master...or is that mistress..or is that...oh, hell. You're the mattress! Excellent poem.
DreamEvil
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2 posted 1999-09-10 01:15 AM


Lady deVine the well of wisdom you draw from is deep indeed. This is a truly profound experience and your words more than do it justice. I could feel your awe of the man and the moment.

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
DreamEvil©



Andrew Scott
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3 posted 1999-09-10 02:20 AM


Very visual and very emotional. An excellent read Lady deVine. I bow to you and yours.

RainbowGirl
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4 posted 1999-09-10 05:19 AM


Ohhhhhh...PDV....You surpassed yourself...it's absolutely wonderful...:-)))

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


JTF
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5 posted 1999-09-10 05:42 AM


I can close my eyes and visualise the moment ... superb ! ...
suthern
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6 posted 1999-09-10 06:55 AM


Excellent, PDV!
WhtDove
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7 posted 1999-09-10 09:52 AM


This was quite superb! I could visualize this as I was standing there. Very, very nice!
LOL...Balladeer. It was an excellent poem PdV.

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 1999-09-10 10:18 AM


PdV....what an excellent piece. I sit here in awe having read it 3 times in a row now. Very well written....your works inspire me.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Justbleu
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9 posted 1999-09-15 06:03 PM


It's intersting when I read a poem that I truly enjoyed...but have no clue how it really made me feel or why it made me feel that way!! I liked it!!

Thanks!!

Justbleu

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"Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???"

Elizabeth
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10 posted 1999-09-15 06:40 PM


It's beautiful, Ms. deVine. I loved the first verse especially-great imagery there. Of course, I enjoyed the rest of the poem too.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


Iloveit
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11 posted 1999-09-15 06:52 PM


yep will ditto the entire 10 posts above me, even if suthern claims its an illegal ditto, but I agree, wonderful job!
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