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Crossing Deserts

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Severn
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0 posted 09-09-99 08:22 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Silence
in that chamber
of the heart
that belongs
to you
alone

I hear your voice
always
though
at times
you hide from me
'I've been busy'
yet you tell me
'you're not alone
in this feeling'
in this suffering

I want you

here

now

just to look in your eyes
and hear your whisper
against my hair

so cruel
Dearest
that such strength
of passion
is futile

we both live
for passion:
of words, of thought
of the imagined touch
of us
the unimaginable touch
of us

for we would be consumed
in our own fire
of devasted love
a phoenix without wings

These people
drifting in
and out of
our lives
don't spark our fevers

yet you ignite me
and I you

one
look
of
you
and
I
am aflame
alight
burning
ash

What else is there?
Who else?

Tell me
and I would cross deserts
for relief

I'm not sure
I can be like you
loving another
and loving you
apart

Perhaps for me
your heart burns
only red fire
while mine
is pale as snow
hotter than the sun

I could go on and on
sending words
into the silent air
words you'll never hear

Sending the cries
of my heart
the lost cries
of my heart

9.9.99

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'Only the shallow know themselves.' Oscar Wilde.
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
roxane
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us


1 posted 09-09-99 09:45 PM       View Profile for roxane   Email roxane   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for roxane

I really liked this one. I really could never make a suggestion on it. It just flowed in all the right places and I completely related to it. Thank you for a great read.
Severn
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since 07-17-99
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2 posted 09-09-99 09:53 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

ThankYOU for reading and liking, roxane!
Balladeer
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3 posted 09-09-99 10:31 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Severn, this is very, very good. There is a ton of thoughts in this poem and a lot of sad/angry/longing feelings. Many thoughts here can be related to easily
WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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4 posted 09-09-99 10:39 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

What can I say, I agree with Balladeer on this! Very well done!
Tara Simms
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since 08-12-99
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5 posted 09-09-99 10:43 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

I've felt that before. You expressed it beautifully.
moonmoon
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since 08-13-99
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6 posted 09-09-99 11:04 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon


Severn, your poem ignited a plethora of emotions in me..What touched me most was the devastation of love & the metaphor 'pheonix without wings'...
Thanks for the read..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


Severn
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7 posted 09-10-99 12:41 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

wow!
Thankyou all so much.
Balladeer - I'm overcome by your praise.
WhiteDove - I echo the sentiment
Tara - it's a hard feeling is it not?
moonmoon - like I said to roxane - thankYOU
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


8 posted 09-10-99 12:45 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Egad girl! You just keep getting better and better. You know how I know that? Because I can find absolutely no fault with this. The passion in this is sweltering! I abslutely LOVED how you broke up:


I want you

here

now


A graceful bow accompanied by hearty applause!
Pepper
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since 08-19-99
Posts 3134
Southern Florida

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9 posted 09-10-99 12:58 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Severn this is excellent.....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Severn
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10 posted 09-12-99 03:46 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Chris - a big bow in return!
Pepper - thankyou
caroline
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11 posted 09-12-99 12:25 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Severn...I can't find enough praise for this one! It is perfection! I wish I had written this myself

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Denise
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since 08-22-99
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12 posted 09-12-99 01:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Severn, what a masterpiece! So much emotion, so skillfully displayed. Absolutely beautiful!

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Denise
Severn
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13 posted 09-15-99 07:51 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I've just read your replies, caroline and dsnyder and I'm truly stunned at your praise. Thankyou both very very much.
Dark Angel
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14 posted 07-10-2001 11:33 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Very Passionate K, Wow!
I don't know how I missed this one.

Maree

"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~

passing shadows
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