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Dark Angel
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0 posted 09-09-99 02:36 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

As I hide behind shadows
On this rocky New Orleans Street
My eyes are transfixed to beauty
And this beauty I shall meet

Her walk, so graceful and so fine
Her skin like porcelain
Her warm blood shall be my wine
And it shall be time and again

I hear her name is Evelyn
This mortal night shall be her last
Her soul to exist in my heaven
A hypnotic trance I will cast

She will become my immortal wife
I will love her to infinity
The darkness will be her life
She will crave for her duty

I approach her, My Angel
And take her with such gentless
Ahhh sweet Angel
You're now my Angel of Darkness

She stares at me bearly alive
Shedding a sorrowful tear
Trying so hard to survive
These words she mutters with fear

Damn You, Damn you into hell
Her eyes without life
I'd much rather die
Than be your immortal wife.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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1 posted 09-09-99 02:46 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

This is quite the haunting tale you've spun. Of course, I'm biased as vampires are my favorite supernatural menace.

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
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2 posted 09-09-99 02:48 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Thank you Dream,Vampire's have my attention too
WhtDove
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3 posted 09-09-99 08:34 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

DA, this was really good! A little on the dark side. lol But very well done!
Dark Angel
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4 posted 09-09-99 08:55 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Thanks WhtDove, yes tis a little on the Dark side something different for me,first time and I enjoyed writing it . Thanks again

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Christopher
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5 posted 09-10-99 01:52 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Good story, with a unforseen ending!
And out of curiosity, if you dub yourself Dark Angel, how is it that this is your first peice of darkness?
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6 posted 09-10-99 02:13 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Thanks Christopher for your comment
I dub myself Dark Angel, for I love reading up on Vampires,anything to do with Vampires,and yes it is true, this is my first piece of Darkness, believe it or not Except for a short story I wrote about a year ago. I don't even know if you'd call it Dark. Not even sure if there will be more to come.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Justbleu
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7 posted 09-15-99 01:32 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Intersting piece...I liked it!!

Definatley dark...I wouldn't mind reading more!!

Justbleu

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"Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???"
Dark Angel
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8 posted 09-15-99 02:52 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Justbleu, thanks again

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 09-23-1999 12:41 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nicely written....the ending takes one by surprise

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!
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10 posted 09-23-1999 12:50 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Although I'm not into the vampire thing, I liked the way this was written...perhaps you should do a 'trilogy' on this?
Lorelei
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11 posted 09-23-1999 12:56 AM       View Profile for Lorelei   Email Lorelei   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Lorelei's Home Page   View IP for Lorelei

I'd just like to say that I enjoyed it very much, the ending caught me by surprise, I even laughed. I am also fascinated with vampires, next to mythology, it is my favorite subject to read up on. And as for the comment where you said you're not sure if there'd be more like this one, I hope not! I look forward to reading more of you work.
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12 posted 09-23-1999 02:02 AM       View Profile for Ladycat   Email Ladycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ladycat's Home Page   View IP for Ladycat

I absolutely love vampires and this piece made me think of Vampire the Masquerade and also Kindred the Embraced. It made me think of the so many times that I have role played.. I'm sure that is not exactly what you wanted to hear.. What I'm trying to say is that your piece sparked fond memories.. Thank you..

Love,
Lady
"Sometimes at night the wolves are silent and only the moon howls."
Dark Angel
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13 posted 09-23-1999 03:45 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

hoot, thank you so much, I appreciate your comment
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Glad you liked it Poet "trilogy" hmm wil lthink about it
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Happy to hear you enjoyed it Lorelei, Mythology fascinates me too,since school days
Thank you for your lovley comment
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Thank you so much Ladycat I'm glad that it sparked fond memories

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


 
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