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When i see you

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Richard 33
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since 09-09-99
Posts 197
glen easton, wv usa


0 posted 09-09-99 02:07 AM       View Profile for Richard 33   Email Richard 33   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Richard 33

when i look all i see is a screen, but that
is ok because in my mind,i see your presence.
in my heart, i feel you captivating me.
your lines of beauty show throuh with every
key that you stroke, and with every stroke,
you pull the strings of my heart.
i see sunny days & skies of blue,i see
people happy in love, i see stars shining
brightly across the night sky, and all of these things bring me to you. You are out there woman that brings me such happieness
please hear my call. please tap on my wall.
take the chance,knock on my heart's door to
a happier world beyond. dare to love,and so
it shall be. because the person that thinks
so much of you is me.
© Copyright 1999 Richard 33 - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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since 07-20-99
Posts 1046
Indiana, USA


1 posted 09-09-99 04:30 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Welcome to Passions. I know what you want to say...are you having trouble saying it. The subject is a good one. I thought the "hear my call...tap on my wall," was good. Keep working like fine wine poets improve with age (practice).

INclan
poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
Arkansas


2 posted 09-09-99 08:57 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh, he's not so new INclan...he just left us for awhile, and the punishment for that is......a NEW name! He's our old " y.Baker 33"......Nonetheless, we're glad to have him back!

As far as this poem goes, I think it's absolutely beautiful.....thank you so much for writing such a heartfelt piece.....I look forward to you "updating" us with more since you've been gone so long!!!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 09-09-99 08:58 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nicely done, thanks for posting and welcome!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 07-22-99
Posts 9561
Illinois


4 posted 09-09-99 09:31 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I thought this was quite well done myself! Beautiful!
Richard 33
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since 09-09-99
Posts 197
glen easton, wv usa


5 posted 09-09-99 02:30 PM       View Profile for Richard 33   Email Richard 33   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Richard 33

Thanks for the many wonderful returns.
It feels so good to be back.
DBeth
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since 09-09-99
Posts 110
providence,ky.42450


6 posted 09-09-99 02:40 PM       View Profile for DBeth   Email DBeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DBeth

It gets you right there.very good poem. alot of talent!
 
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