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Was it all in vain?(A real experiment here!)

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0 posted 09-09-99 01:54 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

They lived and loved for years,
The young maiden and her squire,
They loved through trials and tears,
They were never stuck in the mire.

They loved in secret and in shame,
They were not permitted to marry,
She was deemed to good for him,
All he seemed to do was tarry.

They met in secret on the battlements,
No matter what the season,
Stealing moments when they could,
Their love and thoughts had no reason.

But this night she had some bad news to share with her love,
The thunder roared, the lightning struck,
The wind shrieked up above,
Their love was out of luck.

She was to leave the next day,
To the far off castle of Iverness,
To marry her unknown betrothed,
A fate of lonliness.

She seemed so very different this night,
As she was lashed with wind and rain,
Her love knew right away and with fright,
She had poisoned herself in vain.

He held her tightly as her life slipped away,
He said without her he couldn't go on,
She fought him weakly only wanting to say,
That he could and would go on.

He lifted her oh so gently and held her close to his heart,
He kissed her pale lips and started walking towards the edge of the tower,
She knew then what he intended to do,
And didn't even cower.

He stood with her on the edge of the battle ment,
And kissed her one last time,
A kiss that never broke,
As he stepped off the edge, their love be heaven sent.

And now they have passed over,
Abounding with happy ever after
Their love was never understood,
But was it all in vain?

Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.

[This message has been edited by Isis (edited 09-09-99).]
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1 posted 09-09-99 04:40 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Interesting poem....I like the verse. I thought it was well thought out and well written. I will pass on the subject and the outcome. Having lost loved ones(!) to suicide over a member of the opposit sex, while still in High School.....I have rather strong opinions on the subject and will refrain from further comment.

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2 posted 09-09-99 09:43 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great story, but a sad one.
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3 posted 09-09-99 11:49 AM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

I like this one it has so many emotions neatly tied together.
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4 posted 09-09-99 12:20 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

Beautifully written Isis. thank you for sharing.
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5 posted 09-09-99 02:51 PM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

It is so "Romeo and Juliet", Very well written of course. You did a very good job of writing this. You can tell a story very well. Hope to hear one of a little lighter though.

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6 posted 09-09-99 07:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very romantic and tragic. Very well written too!

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7 posted 09-09-99 08:07 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Wow, I don't know how to comment! This was an exquisite piece, and such a romanticly sad story! Oh how sad though that they had to die to be together.....or so they thought.....tragic. Beautiful form and rhyme....great job.

I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

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