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Through the eyes of a child..!!

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moonmoon
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0 posted 09-09-99 01:45 AM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for moonmoon



Vibrating thunder, cackling lightning,
Rainy days troubled my life
If it rained, there was sorrow
Beading tears in my weary eyes
The dribbling water,gray silhouette
Weighing down my desolate soul

But today,in this torrent rain
Before I slipped to impotent disdain,
My little girl gripped my awe
A miracle bolt stunned my woe

She stood by the window, smiling at rain
Prancing up her curly mane
Little head bent on pane
Fingers trailing drops of rain

With sparkling eyes and smile on lips
The cherub sang with swaying hips
"Come back another day
little Gingin wants to play"

She wasn't singing to dim the rain off
Rather,was humming to those zillion drops
The infant face was so absorbed
As if, she saw darts of red and gold..!

Until today, rain was gruesome
As if my soul was deaf and dumb
Those eyes of innocence, two years old,
Opened my vision to magnificence galore

Today's rain will surpass my memories
Rainy days will never give me worries..!



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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


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Isis
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1 posted 09-09-99 02:06 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Beautifully written. Aaah to see again through the eyes of a child. I get amazing reminders too, from my four year old.
Always make the memories.......:

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


Sue
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2 posted 09-09-99 02:44 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

It takes a child to experience such pleasure in simple things. May we learn from this - I think it's beautiful.
~one voice~
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3 posted 09-09-99 06:33 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Moonmoon, I am in awe over this poem of yours! I love it so much! You definitely have a talent with words! Wow!!!

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~onevoice~

"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."

Tara Simms
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moonmoon, I love this! isn't it amazing how our children make us see the world through new eyes? my kids have so much fun when it storms. their eyes light up when the "from-under" roars and the lightning strikes. they pretend they are "ghostbusting"!

"fingers trailing drops of rain"-my favorite line. i could see it!
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 09-09-99 08:54 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very nice to see things in that light isn't it?

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
WhtDove
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6 posted 09-09-99 08:58 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This was very moving! Thank God, we are able to see through the eyes of a child, for as an adult our vision gets blurred! Thanks!
moonmoon
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Thank you one & all..Really, your comments mean a lot to me..

Sometimes, when I see kids,I feel like, until now, I was not living at all..Thank God that I was once a kid too..Weren't we all?? ..Hehe...Can't seem to remember much though..!!
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8 posted 09-09-99 05:06 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Terrific, moonmoon. To be able to see things through children's eyes and then write about it is very creative. No writer's block for you!
Julie
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9 posted 09-09-99 05:37 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

I love the innocent of children. WELL TOLD!
GREAT READ!

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Julie
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Andrew Scott
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10 posted 09-09-99 07:02 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

To have eyes that are young and a soul so clean that they only see the beauty this world has to offer. You did a wonderful job. My thanks for sharing this special moment in such a special way.
Denise
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11 posted 09-09-99 07:14 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Little ones never cease to teach us! Very well done. I enjoyed this very much!

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Denise
moonmoon
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12 posted 09-09-99 08:51 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon


Thank you Sir Balladeer..Coming from the numero uno, I consider it high praise.. I wish I could capture every moment of my lil' girl, into poetry...I am blocked all right..!!

Thankyou Julie,Andrew & Dysnider...Your thoughtful comments are very much appreciated...I feel encouraged by your support..



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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


Kitty**
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13 posted 09-09-99 09:46 PM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

moonmoon..Simply put, this was great.
Thanks for the opportunity to read it!
redwriter1
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14 posted 09-09-99 11:11 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

If this is your first experience of seeing thru your child's eyes... boyy do you have many more great moments to come..

Please watch for them. they go by very quickly.. watch in silence...and in awe.. and they alone will reveal to you, who you are inside.
moonmoon
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Thank you kitty..

Redwriter,thanks for the insight..What you said is so true,we are all being reborn through the eyes of our children.. Sometimes I feel like 'we' are the infants & 'they' are the adults.! We could learn so much from them..!!
Pepper
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16 posted 09-10-99 12:43 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

moonmoon, very lovely....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
moonmoon
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17 posted 09-14-99 02:11 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon

Thanks for the kind words Pepper..
juanita
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18 posted 09-15-99 06:19 AM       View Profile for juanita   Email juanita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juanita

THIS ONE I ENJOYED GREATLY!
THANKS FOR SHARING.
JennyLee
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19 posted 09-15-99 09:16 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

I love this so much...it reminds me if my friends little girl talking to the rain!!!
You can write about anything can't you?
More.......
Severn
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20 posted 09-15-99 08:19 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

moonmoon, what a way to find appreciation! And your poem did it justice.
moonmoon
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Thanks a lot all of you...Very much appreciated..
passing shadows
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22 posted 04-23-2004 12:39 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

pretty good write here
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