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OPINION PLEASE, AT LEAST THE SPELLING IS OKAY..(I think)

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Kitty**
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0 posted 09-08-99 09:20 PM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

No Reprieve

Upon foreign sod she trods,
her heart is heavy laden.
Betrothed by time, claimed
by none, this gentle and fair maiden.

She treads alone, on new soil
unfamiliar with worldly ways.
Bitter lessons stalk her heels,
And within her being, stays.

Her past is left in shadows,
Her future yet untold.
Faltering footsteps placed upon
A land barren and cold.

Unrelinquished love has she.
It lies as a smoldering fire.
Save but one, there is no other,
that can quench her souls desire.

She rejoices not, from her life,
her love is not returned.
Each new day brings heartache,
and again her love is spurned.

Darkness lies within her soul,
in despair she bows her head.
And dainty footsteps are all that's found,
upon the cliffs raw edge.
© Copyright 1999 Kitty Sandridge - All Rights Reserved
traveler
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1 posted 09-08-99 09:30 PM       View Profile for traveler   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for traveler

Stunning, I'm at a loss for words ...a very touching piece ... welcome to the forums ...
looking forward to your next post ...
Skyfyre
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2 posted 09-08-99 10:00 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

This might sound like a callous question but ... did she jump? (wanting to make sure I understand).

This was good ... I enjoyed the read, looking forward to more ...

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


Kitty**
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3 posted 09-08-99 10:13 PM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

Traveler..Thank you sincerely for your welcome and I am VERY proud of your comment.
I read constantly here and post occasionaly..Don't consider myself a 'poet'
but I do get brave and post every now and then.

Nocht..You asked "did she jump'? I really don't know..At the time I wrote this, 'she
jumped' but now I think maybe she just climbed down..;-) Thanks to you and to all that takes the time to read my 'stuff'.
moonmoon
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4 posted 09-09-99 12:56 AM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon


Well written Kitty..I think, at some point in our lives, we all feel as if we are standing so alone with our 'unrelinquished love'..I hope it was a passing phase for you..


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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr


Isis
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5 posted 09-09-99 01:32 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Kitty I LOVE it!! :
I find it hard to write about fantasy, for me it's easier writing the things I know.
Share the secret please? :

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~


WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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6 posted 09-09-99 09:55 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well, maybe you should consider posting more often! This was very well done! I think you did a fantastic job!
hoot_owl_rn
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Nicely written Kitty...I enjoyed the read and welcome!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Andrew Scott
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8 posted 09-09-99 01:19 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Lady Kitty: Such a visual in that last stanza. At first I thought she jumped, but then something else took hold. Your line in the third stanza "Her future yet untold" makes me think she just walked away. Perhaps only her spurned love was cast over the edge and now she travels new lands in search of a better one. Thanks for sharing what I felt to be a very emotional piece. Keep em' coming.
pen of passion
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9 posted 09-09-99 08:51 PM       View Profile for pen of passion   Email pen of passion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen of passion

I too hope she did not jump. Nicely written.
Kitty**
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10 posted 09-09-99 08:59 PM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

To all of you who has or will respond to this
'poem'?..
Isis, WhtDove, moonmoon, hoot_owl_rn Andrew Scott, etc. None of you can possibly know how
good it makes me feel to think someone has enjoyed something I wrote. You all have given me the encouragement to keep trying.
Thank you all so much!!!
Denise
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11 posted 09-09-99 09:08 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done Kitty. I thought this was excellent.
caroline
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12 posted 09-09-99 09:13 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

May I add my welcome to you, and my compliments on a well crafted poem. It was mesmerizing!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
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