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I don't have a title for this one....help?

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Starith
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0 posted 09-08-99 11:31 AM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Starith

I stand here at the top of a tree,
Looking out over a vast sea.

As I watch a bird takes flight, a dove.
The body of water, an ocean of love.

I have two choices I can make,
Stand here watching, or a chance I can take.

Leave my perch,
And go in search,

Of the love
Waiting for "this" dove.

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[This message has been edited by Starith (edited 09-08-99).]
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WhtDove
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1 posted 09-08-99 11:41 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well there I don't know if I can help here. So many things going through my head. "Do I search?" "The way I see it?" I dunno! Sorry a thousand through my mind, don't quite seem to fit....
A small critique here if you don't mind, check your spelling..
traveler
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2 posted 09-08-99 02:16 PM       View Profile for traveler   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for traveler

I liked it! ...I don't have the expertise to offer any suggestions on a title ...not very handy at poetry or love ...

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RainbowGirl
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3 posted 09-08-99 02:17 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Peace...that's what I see..:-)

HuGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Starith
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4 posted 09-08-99 02:36 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Thank you so much for your kind comments...and spelling corrections...one thing I'm not so good at when it comes to writing it seems...LOL. But I think I have fixed the problems now.

Star

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Sue
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5 posted 09-08-99 03:17 PM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

"Distance" falls into my mind when I read this poem. It all seems so far away, but if you go out and do something about it you can bridge that distance.
Do it.
Skyfyre
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6 posted 09-08-99 08:36 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

How about "Turning Point"? It seems to me that you are at the brink of a possible one in your life, if this is what the poem reflects ...

Well done ... a pleasant read.

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


Starith
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7 posted 09-09-99 05:34 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Sue: Funny that you would say that...I feel as though I'm a million miles away from someplace, and yet that's the place I'm supposed to be. Thanks for the advice.

Nocht: Thank you for your suggestion.

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hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 09-09-99 09:13 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very nice and I think I have a perfect suggestion for the title..."Taking Flight"

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
 
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