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Death in the eyes of a Lover

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Severn
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0 posted 09-07-99 07:59 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

O, your heart will keen
your favor carried in his hand
as upon the mighty steed of death
he fights the battle of his end
'Return to me!' you scream
as he lies upon the dueling field
your favor bloodied in his hand
Sunset streaks of red red wine
bloody bruises in the sky
fading clouds of mourning grey
echo the few remaining threads
of wretched dying breath
A wail, a scream
as the lance of life
loosens from his weakened hand
A summons from the hall of grief
trembles through your sticken soul
and your world quakes in sorrow
as the waves on your shores
run red

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'Only the shallow know themselves.' Oscar Wilde.
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 09-07-99 09:44 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

An excellent portrayal of grief. This reads like a classic. Very well done.

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Denise
hoot_owl_rn
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Nicely written

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Severn
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3 posted 09-07-99 11:15 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thankyou both! I thought it might have been a bit depressing actually.
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


4 posted 09-07-99 11:26 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

"Fading clouds of mourning grey." That is absolutely beautiful Severn. And yes it's depressing, but in a "noble Love" kind of way.

PS. Metaphors as ever,lie hidden in your hand
Severn
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5 posted 09-07-99 11:31 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Hello, my friend - so good to have you here!
Severn
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6 posted 09-07-99 11:32 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Oh Chris - sorry, thanks for your praise!! Means a lot as always.
 
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