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From Creek To Beast To Oblivion

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Toerag
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0 posted 09-07-99 09:20 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Toerag

As you all know..I know "diddly' 'bout poetry....I'm not sure if this IS even poetry....but it took a long time to write it?.......Comments would be appreciated....

From the clouds in the sky
The rain falling my seed
God's warming from the sun
My flowing blood runs
Over the earth
Becoming as one
God's speed.

Silently in the beginning
Uncovering brown and gold
Red-Yellow and green
Beneath my mother's snow whiteness
Until my silent voice
Carries colored leaves
And rolls over stones

My Father's warmth touches
I soon become strong
By which I'm to live
And travel along
To where I belong

In pools amongst grasses, where leaves have fallen,
I have life that is miraculous
Some drink of my blood
Life needs me to sustain
I can reflect one's image
In my current like mirror

I reflect colors of the sky,
My body "waved" by the wind
I make fog for the night
And mist for the morning
And rainbows for your sight

Grasses and lilies, dress up my edges
Rocks, soil and towns,
I eat from my creek banks
And color with sound
I rush and splash and roar
With white capped manes,
As a wild free stallion.
I sing-glide and flow
With green clear blue
And travel deep silent
Joining brothers and sisters
Becoming one giant

Our blood and soil now blended
And too-Life and fishes
We carry large ships
Our strength now harnessed
Photographed and painted
Marvelled at or swam in
And sometimes given a name

We flow under bridges
Sometimes over dams
Infected with sewage
Litter and cans

At jouney's end
Where rivers last go
To be lost in the sea
The end of our flow.

© Copyright 1999 Toerag - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 09-07-99 09:43 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Toerag,
Wonderful paint, it hit me like a Jackson Pollock. But it all made sense and you did a good job.
JTF
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2 posted 09-07-99 09:47 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Oh man !!! ... you've became way much too serious for me ... I've understood though that you see yourself as a stallion ... you conceited old scallywag !! ... ... stunning job though ... did you smoke the carpet before ?
Toerag
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Ala bam a


3 posted 09-07-99 09:50 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Thanks yall......JTF.....Yanno me better than that Jef...this is my last attempt at that serious schtuff......it's too much work!!!
RainbowGirl
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4 posted 09-07-99 09:53 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Wow!...

HUSG

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traveler
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5 posted 09-07-99 09:57 AM       View Profile for traveler   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for traveler

Well Toe, if your looking for comments on the technical stuff, that will need to come from one of our many accomplished poets ... as an avid reader all I can say is that I loved this ... thanks so much ...
JTF
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6 posted 09-07-99 09:59 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Seriously Toe, it's worth the result !!
WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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7 posted 09-07-99 10:09 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

No doubt Toe! You did a great job! I hope you don't stop trying at this! It was remarkable buddy! I hope to see more from you!
Sunshine
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8 posted 09-07-99 10:23 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Even 'tho the water may be tainted...it is still life's force.

Very different, unusual, and may we see more, please!
Lucie
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9 posted 09-07-99 11:38 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Toerag!! Stop! Your scaring me! Drop the pen and step slowly away!

Promise me your not gonna spin your head and spit green stuff at us now! Cause your possessed.. Feel your funny bone Toe.. make sure its still there. Then run back to the funny sunny side of the forum!!!

(I did like the poem though )
Iloveit
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10 posted 09-07-99 02:42 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

toe (she says softly) you make me smile with your funny stuff, but I love your serious side, that is beautiful and very deep!...
LngJhnAg
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11 posted 09-07-99 03:14 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

This is the Toerag I've been waiting for. The serious stuff is a lot of work, but its worth it. Great use of similes and an almost-irritating flow into and out of rhyme.
Starith
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12 posted 09-07-99 03:46 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Unsual for you Toe, but I enjoyed it very much...thanks for the read...and it is considered poetry to me.

Star

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hoot_owl_rn
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13 posted 09-07-99 06:26 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nice to see you write something serious Toe...enjoyed it

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Balladeer
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14 posted 09-07-99 07:00 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

JEEZ! I can tangle with a Toerag but I can't hold back a raging river. Dam it all!

I'm not good at critiquing free verse but there is certainly talent displayed here by visions portrayed and imagination skillfully used. You're finally beginning to scare me!
PhaerieChild
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15 posted 09-07-99 10:39 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Toerag,
Usually I sit and read all your funny stuff and laugh til I cry. This accomplished that bypassing the laughter and though I really love your funny work this is beautiful and would like to see more of it. (Between the giggles though,okay?) Real good work!!

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suthern
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16 posted 09-08-99 01:54 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I think I'm speechless! *G* All I can say is WOW!!! You didn't just paint a picture with your pen... you lead us on a journey as rich and diverse as life itself. Excellent job, dear friend... very well done!
BrightLight
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17 posted 09-08-99 06:37 AM       View Profile for BrightLight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrightLight

Wow, This was awesome, so descriptive, so moving, keep your pen going there my friend.
Toerag
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18 posted 09-08-99 08:28 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Thanks gang....Kind words from kind folks!
 
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