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If I'd Have Only Known ( a different format)

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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 09-07-99 08:57 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

If Id Have Only Known

If Id have only known
That you would go away
I would have told you sooner
That I wanted you to stay
I would have showed you how important
You were to me each day
If Id have only known

If Id have only known
Your childhood wouldnt last
And how someday Id find myself
Clinging to the past
I wouldnt have wished our lives away
Or let time go so fast
If Id have only known

If Id have only known
How one thing leads to another
How in this crazy world of ours
Its brother against brother
And that you'd risk your very life
Just to save some other
If Id have only known

If Id have only known
Flag on your coffin draped around
With a twenty-one gun salute
Amidst its thundering sound
While my tears and rain drops fell
Theyd sink you in the ground
If Id have only known

If Id have only known
How everything would go
When you went away to war
Just two short years ago
I would have made sure to tell you
How much I loved you so
If Id have only known

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 09-07-99).]
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Lucie
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1 posted 09-07-99 09:02 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Hoot, I really liked this style. You did well with it. Good Job!
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 09-07-99 10:01 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
We understand
And if we had only known
We would have lent a hand.
Enjoyed the poem. Good job.
WhtDove
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3 posted 09-07-99 10:12 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Hoot this was really good! Makes ya stop and think why they say live every moment as if it were your last! Thank you for reminding me Hon! I loved it!
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 09-07-99 10:17 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Lucie< seymore and WhtDove...thank you all so much. I thought I'd give a shot at something different while passing on a good message at the same time...wasn't quite sure how it would work. The message...time is to short to waste and we can't control the future so let those you love know that while you can.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
miriam
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5 posted 09-07-99 12:59 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

great poem..made me think twice. My boyfriend is in the Army. thanks for the warm hear.
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6 posted 09-07-99 08:05 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

What a great poem and message. This made me think about the people I care about.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

hoot_owl_rn
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Mariam and Elizabeth, thank you both
Mariam...I wish you well with your boyfriend

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Andrew Scott
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8 posted 09-07-99 08:15 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Greetings Lady Hoot! A fine bit of work... I like the repetative message and the style. When I read this it gave me the feeling of a period piece aimed at the Civil War, where it was "brother against brother" and so many young men, no more than children, died. Was this your intent or just my reading into it?
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9 posted 09-07-99 09:33 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is an excellent form. Beginning and ending each stanza with the same line is very powerful and hits hard, as long as the line is good. Yours definitely is. Isn't poetry fun?
hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 09-07-99 09:53 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Andrew...that is basically what I had in mind...but this could be set in any time including the present. Isn't all war brother against brother since we are all brothers of sorts??

Balladeer...thank you and in answer to your question...poetry is fun yes, but even more importantly poetry is life, depth, and realization...it is through our verses that we speak and if we are so fortunate to get our message across, we have done well by ourselves and by others.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Isis
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11 posted 09-07-99 10:01 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Beautifully written, a timely reminder to us all to do what I try to do each day, live each day like it's the last, and say all that needs to be said. Don't wait, do it while you can. You may not get another chance.
It's a hard thing to live with at times, but our loved ones know.....

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~

Denise
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12 posted 09-07-99 10:18 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great message and format!

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Denise

[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 09-07-99).]
hoot_owl_rn
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Thank you Denise and Isis

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Pepper
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a wonderful piece.....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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