Rocky road runs like a serpent...

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Open Poetry #2

Rocky road runs like a serpent...

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-09-07 02:43 AM

Rocky road runs like a serpent
Swaying gently with its rear
As the sunset lead its chasers
To a trail of a deer

Here, they hear the quiet whispers
As the night allures them in
“Don’t go further into darkness,
Where your dreams cannot be seen”

And the brave explorers stagger
Some turn back and others go
But what happened to them after
I decided not to know

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 1999-09-07 08:47 AM

Quite impressive...this poem is very smmoth...leading the reader further and further into it's wake. I really enjoyed the imagery you used with the road...I could picture that easily in my mind. Nice rhythym and rhyme.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 1999-09-07 11:50 AM

THanks Howl! I'm not sure about the ending what do you think?

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I fell in love and kept on falling

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