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Rocky road runs like a serpent...

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Master
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Rocky road runs like a serpent
Swaying gently with its rear
As the sunset lead its chasers
To a trail of a deer

Here, they hear the quiet whispers
As the night allures them in
“Don’t go further into darkness,
Where your dreams cannot be seen”

And the brave explorers stagger
Some turn back and others go
But what happened to them after
I decided not to know

© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
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Quite impressive...this poem is very smmoth...leading the reader further and further into it's wake. I really enjoyed the imagery you used with the road...I could picture that easily in my mind. Nice rhythym and rhyme.

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Master
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THanks Howl! I'm not sure about the ending what do you think?

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