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Julie
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0 posted 09-06-99 09:57 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Julie

Glory to God In the Highest

Gensis tells the beginning of man,
Loving his wife all that he can.
Owning free will, and growing fruit,
Refrain from eating,for I will give you root.
Young as they were, they disobeyed,

To find themselves lost in dismay.

Gently, He said, now there is sin,
Ordained by Me, it is here you begin.
Decayed and weakend never to win.

In leaving the Garden where they slept,
The trials surmounted as they wept.

Heritage brought relief of man,
It was Moses who renewed the land,
God gave us Jesus, Our Savior so grand,
Helping us...like footprints in the sand.
Examples of the apostles and Messiah too,
Sacrificed themselves and freed us to do
The love of Jesus, for it is true.

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Julie
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Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure.
Marianne Williamson
© Copyright 1999 Julie - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 09-06-99 10:02 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Julie, you should consider posting this in the spiritual section of the main forum when Ron opens it for submissions..... This is wonderful!!
Julie
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2 posted 09-07-99 12:07 AM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Thank you, Nan. Thought I would try something a little different and good grief...it worked.
p.s. I will take you up on that offer.


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Julie
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Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure.
Marianne Williamson
miriam
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3 posted 09-07-99 04:55 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

your poem reminded me of this song we sang at church when i was a kid:
"Yes Jesus loves me, the Bible tells me so".

Amen to your poem
jfreak
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4 posted 09-08-99 04:33 PM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Well julie,

I must say that you wrote a very good poem. I just think the only thing that you could work on with this poem is continuing the history in the word. You speak very in depthly of Adam and Eve then move to Moses, which is a decent jump. But, and I say this only in a creative way, you made too much of a jump to Jesus. It would have been a little better, in my opinion if you would have built up to Jesus. The whole Old Testament is a preperation for Jesus. So I think it would have been even better if you would have expounded on more, such as going on to talk about Joshua, then on to Gideon and Samson, to Ruth and Boaz, to Jonathan and David, to Daniel, to the other prophets, to John the Baptist, then to Jesus. I think you understand what I am getting at. Not to say the poem is bad, I just think you could have made it that more greater. Keep up the good work.

Jfreak
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5 posted 09-08-99 05:25 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

It takes courage to put your faith out there, especially, I believe, in poetic form. You've done a wonderful work here, and dittos follow everyone else's comments. Good work, Lady!
Julie
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6 posted 09-08-99 09:08 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Thank you all for your endearing comments. Although I do have a special message for jfreak.
I am not a minister or hold a priesthood and
not well versed on the Old Testament (although I should be). I do have strong faith and that was the message I intended to share with my audience. Thank you for your opinion.

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Julie
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Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure.
Marianne Williamson
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7 posted 09-25-1999 08:07 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Julie, You should be proud of yourself, this poem is splendid, I really enjoyed what it had to offer.
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 09-25-1999 09:00 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Julie,
You write well no matter the subject. Good job.
Denise
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9 posted 09-25-1999 12:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very nicely done, Julie!

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Denise
Julie
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10 posted 09-25-1999 03:56 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Gee LostDreamer...that's a huge compliment.
Seymour: What can I say...I always enjoy
your work and am always flattered by
your words.
Denise: I am always interested in your
thoughts...I admire your work so...

HUGS AND TO ALL OF YOU!

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert



Pepper
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11 posted 09-25-1999 04:11 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

wonderful Julie and amen........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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