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I can't even name this now..hahha.. help!!!!

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Lucie
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0 posted 09-05-99 04:16 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

The Me Behind My Eyes

Your gentle touch upon my skin, the softest of caress
your eyes that smile into mine as you help me to undress.
The way your finger traces with love all the scars on me
the stretch marks on my stomach that I got from pregnancy.

The softness of the figure that I was once so proud to show
I hold the last piece of clothing close, afraid to let it go.
But you just smile gently and pull it slowly from my grasp
then I stand there with my head down for you to view at last.

Afraid that you will comment that my waist is far from flat
that gravity was cruel to me .. oh please donít mention that.
That the lines that show upon my skin are more then you remember
their what I got for keeping a full tan in late December.

Iím sorry that this body is not what you remembered in your dreams.
Please just give me back my clothes, and forget what youíve just seen.
But as I pull my eyes to yours I see a smile there.
I realize you still love me and see desire in your stare.

With gentle hands you pull me close the love upon your face
its like the joy of coming home as I melt in your embrace.
It was in that magic second when this heart did realize
you love me for the me I am, the me behind my eyes.



[This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-06-99).]
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Balladeer
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1 posted 09-05-99 04:26 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You ain't the only one you crack up, girl!

How about "How's the view from you?"
Lucie
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2 posted 09-05-99 04:29 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

or how about.. Have you seen my breasts??? Oh there they are..under my waistband!

hahhaha... I need to get out more..hehe



[This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-05-99).]
doreen peri
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3 posted 09-05-99 04:49 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

lucie, i would call this, "the me behind my eyes" (that's a great line, btw)

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4 posted 09-05-99 04:58 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Lucie

I want to hug you....

HUGS

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Lucie
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5 posted 09-05-99 05:46 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Thanks Doreen, and hugs back to you Rainbow!!
Denise
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6 posted 09-05-99 06:00 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I second dp's suggestion 'the me behind my eyes'. That is a great line indeed!

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Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 09-05-99 06:20 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lucie,
This is a great poem.
And he will always see you as you were.
Once registered it cannot change.
caroline
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8 posted 09-05-99 08:27 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Lucie this is a grand piece of work! It is the worry of so many women...age has taken its toll and we see ourselves in a harsher light than others do. I need to tape this by the mirror!

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PhaerieChild
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9 posted 09-05-99 08:49 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

I echo the sentiments of doreen peri and dsnyder... "the me behind my eyes" has my vote. As I reading this I just wanted to cry cuz I felt so ugly after having kids but he's still here and still has that glow after all this time so I guess it wasn't the waistline he was interested in lol. I love this piece btw..
could ya tell...good job lucie!!

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10 posted 09-05-99 10:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Well, I can't think of a title for this, but I do like Balladeer's. LOL. By the way, loved the poem.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."



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moonmoon
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Very well written Lucie, loved it..
Lucie
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12 posted 09-06-99 12:57 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Ok majority rules... The Me Behind My Eyes..(sorry 'Deer...hehe)

Thank you all for your responses!
Justbleu
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13 posted 09-06-99 01:20 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

That was beautiful!! It made me cry too!!
I loved it!! Thank You!!

If they love you it will matter not what is on the outside but what is the "you behind your eyes."

Jusbleu

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