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I can't even name this now..hahha.. help!!!!
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I can't even name this now..hahha.. help!!!! |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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The Me Behind My Eyes Your gentle touch upon my skin, the softest of caress your eyes that smile into mine as you help me to undress. The way your finger traces with love all the scars on me the stretch marks on my stomach that I got from pregnancy. The softness of the figure that I was once so proud to show I hold the last piece of clothing close, afraid to let it go. But you just smile gently and pull it slowly from my grasp then I stand there with my head down for you to view at last. Afraid that you will comment that my waist is far from flat that gravity was cruel to me .. oh please don’t mention that. That the lines that show upon my skin are more then you remember their what I got for keeping a full tan in late December. I’m sorry that this body is not what you remembered in your dreams. Please just give me back my clothes, and forget what you’ve just seen. But as I pull my eyes to yours I see a smile there. I realize you still love me and see desire in your stare. With gentle hands you pull me close the love upon your face its like the joy of coming home as I melt in your embrace. It was in that magic second when this heart did realize you love me for the me I am, the me behind my eyes. [This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-06-99).] |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You ain't the only one you crack up, girl! How about "How's the view from you?" |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
or how about.. Have you seen my breasts??? Oh there they are..under my waistband! hahhaha... I need to get out more..hehe  [This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-05-99).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
lucie, i would call this, "the me behind my eyes" (that's a great line, btw) |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Lucie I want to hug you.... HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thanks Doreen, and hugs back to you Rainbow!! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I second dp's suggestion 'the me behind my eyes'. That is a great line indeed! ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lucie, This is a great poem. And he will always see you as you were. Once registered it cannot change. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Lucie this is a grand piece of work! It is the worry of so many women...age has taken its toll and we see ourselves in a harsher light than others do. I need to tape this by the mirror!  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
I echo the sentiments of doreen peri and dsnyder... "the me behind my eyes" has my vote. As I reading this I just wanted to cry cuz I felt so ugly after having kids but he's still here and still has that glow after all this time so I guess it wasn't the waistline he was interested in lol. I love this piece btw.. could ya tell...good job lucie!! ------------------ Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, I can't think of a title for this, but I do like Balladeer's. LOL. By the way, loved the poem. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 09-05-99).] |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Very well written Lucie, loved it..  |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Ok majority rules... The Me Behind My Eyes..(sorry 'Deer...hehe) Thank you all for your responses! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
That was beautiful!! It made me cry too!! I loved it!! Thank You!! If they love you it will matter not what is on the outside but what is the "you behind your eyes." Jusbleu ------------------ "Never let anyone keep you from your dreams, follow your heart, be true to yourself, and if that special someone does to, go ahead, walk together side by side as one!! |
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