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Listen to the Warm... reply to Michael's Drifting...

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~one voice~
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0 posted 09-05-99 07:37 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ~one voice~

Michael, I didn't write this and I can't remember who did, but it is my favorite poem of all time. Your poem, "Drifting," made me think of this.

"Listen to the Warm"

This is the way it was while I was waiting for your eyes to find me:


I was drifting,
going no place.
Hypnotized by sunshine, maybe,
barking back at seals along the beach,
skipping flat stones on the water,
but much too wise for sandcastles.
My castles were across the sea,
or still within my mind.
There were beach bars and the other people.
Sometimes little bedrooms were my beach,
but I was drifting...
I must have thought the night could save me as I went down in to pillows,
looked up from dirty windows,
smiled back through broken mattresses,
turned in Thunderbirds,
and kissed in elevators.
I cried too, sometimes,
For Me.
I loved every face I thought looked pretty
and every kindred eye I caught in crowds.
But I was drifting,
before you.
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DreamEvil
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1 posted 09-05-99 07:41 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

One voice, I see why this is your favorite poem. I see much of you in this and understand you a bit better. You are a romantic lost in an ocean of doubt.

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
DreamEvilŠ




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~one voice~
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2 posted 09-05-99 07:44 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

I am glad that you do! Like I said, this is my favorite poem.

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Michael
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3 posted 09-05-99 07:45 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

~one voice~
I can see why this is a favorite of yours. It's a most beautiful piece. There is some similiarities here huh? Much Much happier ending here though. I'm honered my verse could remind you of such an exquisite work. Thank you for sharing it with me.

Michael
~one voice~
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4 posted 09-05-99 07:48 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Michael, I am more than happy to do so!!! I know they aren't quite the same... lol but yes, it didn't remind of this...

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


hoot_owl_rn
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It is indeed a wonderful poem one voice, thanks for posting it

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
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