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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
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0 posted 1999-09-05 12:19 PM


In the meadow by the valley,
under the sea,
is where we stood,
looking upon love and its glory,
or maybe the better word is gory,
for now she lies under the molten sea,
waiting for me,
i hurt her more,
without a touch,
then a whisper,
wild and silent,
speak no more to me,
ive lost the world today,
to get it back i would tempt my sanity



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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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1 posted 1999-09-08 08:21 PM


Another good one. Very sad with a feeling of despair. You capture these emotions well.

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Denise

roxane
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 505
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2 posted 1999-09-13 01:51 PM


this is great. it made me so sad. I especially liked the play on the words "glory" and "gory" Keep it up

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