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Betrayal

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 09-04-99 08:52 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

The last spark of love in my heart has died.
A lover's regret is not worth this price.
Lost is the passion which electrified.
No one should suffer this agony twice.

A lover's regret is not worth this price.
Pain is life, life is short, you will endure.
No one should suffer this agony twice.
Broken hearts humanity must inure.

Pain is life, life is short, you will endure.
The pain goes away with your final breath.
Broken hearts humanity must inure.
Patiently we wait for the kiss of death.

The pain goes away with your final breath.
Grief washes out the pain of tomorrow.
Patiently we wait for the kiss of death.
No one needs the pain that love will borrow.

Grief washes out the pain of tomorrow.
Betrayal kills the passion of today.
No one needs the pain that love will borrow.
The price of love I will no longer pay.

Betrayal kills the passion of today.
Lost is the passion which electrified.
The price of love I will no longer pay.
The last spark of love in my heart has died.


©1999 DreamEvil


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Balladeer
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1 posted 09-04-99 09:06 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You continue to excel in your craft.

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DreamEvil
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2 posted 09-04-99 09:09 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thank you Revered Elder, though my subject matter is not the hearts and flowers kind. I appreciate the reply, it means much.
Poet deVine
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3 posted 09-04-99 09:25 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This style lends itself to your poem of betrayal. You seem to be mastering every poetic style so far. This is again, an excellent piece...you have the ability to put emotion so clearly into words. I admire that!
WhtDove
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4 posted 09-04-99 10:40 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Sad, and yet hopeful! What expression!
caroline
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5 posted 09-04-99 11:13 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

You're a powerful writer, Dream. Good work.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Denise
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Your work is always interesting and worth reading.

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Nicole
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7 posted 09-05-99 12:28 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Well done, as always. You conveyed the emotion very well.
~one voice~
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8 posted 09-05-99 12:34 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Very powerful, Dream... I enjoyed it.

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"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Sue
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9 posted 09-05-99 01:12 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Perfect! It's difficult to use this form without sounding forced, but you managed it, and put a whole world of feeling into it, too.
Wesley the Blue
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10 posted 09-05-99 01:41 AM       View Profile for Wesley the Blue   Email Wesley the Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wesley the Blue

How sad.......I loved it, very nice job.
Michael
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11 posted 09-05-99 03:36 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

What is it we feel when we feel nothing at all? Another great work Dream.

Michael
Dark Angel
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12 posted 09-05-99 04:57 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Dream, excellent work,expressive,I love it

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Sunshine
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You've done it again. Fine piece.
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