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The Jackal
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0 posted 1999-09-04 08:02 PM


The music box landed on the wooden floor
bounced twice them bounced no more
opened up
and the ballerina did dance
I was in a trance
memories flood
and im drowning in the past
the music plays
i remember far better days
she was dancing in the wind
i thought our happiness never could end
but everything that begins
must also end
so i sit here silent
music box on the uncaring floor
and tears still flow to gather more




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© Copyright 1999 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
Saxoness
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1 posted 1999-09-04 08:09 PM


wow, I like this. You always seem to lure the reader in during the poem, and then hook 'em at the very end. Good job.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



Denise
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2 posted 1999-09-04 08:09 PM


Very lovely one indeed!

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Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 1999-09-04 09:04 PM


Beautifully written. I really enjoyed this one.
Balladeer
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4 posted 1999-09-04 09:22 PM


The image and the mood you create is excellent.
caroline
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5 posted 1999-09-04 11:45 PM


This is divine...I enjoyed it.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Alwye
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6 posted 1999-09-05 12:23 PM


Very beautiful..I enjoyed this.

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller


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