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Serenade of the Sirens

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Poet deVine
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0 posted 09-04-99 12:53 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine


He came to the city with hopes and dreams
Of a future filled with possibility
He always had a clear cut plan
Based on his brains and ability.

He worked long days to reach his goal
No minute spent for personal time
He saved for Armani for Rolex and Rolls
Getting dollars from every dime.

He awoke each day focused it’s true
And moved through his world with ease
Until the day he fell apart
And succumbed to a worldly disease.

To stay awake he found a friend,
She was white, a powdery snow.
She cost him some money, some precious time
In the street they called her ‘the blow’.

He tried to resist her powerful pull
But was hooked on the feeling, you see.
He lost his money, lost his job
Lost his will to be free.

So which is the siren call you hear
Money, power or greed
Which is the lust that burns your heart
Which hunger do you feed?


With the pending changes to the main site and with the 'passing' of Open Forum #1, I decided to again post this poem. It was the very first poem I sent to 'Passions in Poetry'. Ron made a wonderful greeting card out of it (a copy of which is hanging in my office - along with a copy of the greeting card using the poem 'Lovers Dance'). If none of you have been to the main site, I suggest that you do. I also encourage you to post your wonderful poetry there when it reopens for submissions....the poems are read on a daily basis and are there forever. The forums are wonderful for instant gratification. But the 'public' doesn't come in here...they stay on the main site and read what's posted there. I checked the numbers tonight.....there were 3,702 hits today...and that was at 8:00 p.m.! I can't tell you how wonderful it is to receive fan mail from someone who just read your poem or just received it in the form of a greeting card! We write to touch other hearts....our poems here touch each other..then float like delicate feathers ever downward. The poems on the main site are there for all time. I truly didn't mean to bend your ear for so long, just wanted to tell you that YOU put the passion in Passions in Poetry! Thank you for posting, responding, caring and for listening!
© Copyright 1999 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 09-04-99 12:59 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Rock on Lady deVine!! I loved this slice of life you chose to repost for us.

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Life is pain is poetry, at least I'll be productive.
DreamEvil©

WhtDove
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2 posted 09-04-99 01:08 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great Job! Lots of thought here, holds real true! Many fall victim to it's powerfulness!
Denise
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3 posted 09-04-99 01:34 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Brilliant! You are truly, truly talented!
Great message wrapped up so nicely!

ps any idea when the main site will reopen?

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Denise
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 09-04-99 08:45 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderfully written poet. I like the basis behind this one and the form works exceptionally well

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 09-04-99 09:24 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Poet deVine,
Never did read this one and I'm glad you reposted it. Wonderful poem.
Angel Rand
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6 posted 09-04-99 09:40 AM       View Profile for Angel Rand   Email Angel Rand   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel Rand

DeVine I agree with Seymore! Thank you for posting it again! As I am new here I would have missed it otherwise.
Angel
Wesley the Blue
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7 posted 09-05-99 01:25 AM       View Profile for Wesley the Blue   Email Wesley the Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wesley the Blue

I loved your poem, and thanks for the advice about posting on the main page, when it re-opens, I would have missed that otherwise, Thanks.
Michael
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8 posted 09-05-99 04:42 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

DeVine One,
I have always felt this poem is a true blessing, glad to see you post it again.

Michael
Dark Angel
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9 posted 09-05-99 05:03 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Poet, i too am glad you reposted this poem, Somehow I missed it, thank you, this is excellent, I enjoyed reading it
Christopher
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10 posted 09-05-99 05:10 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

As is customary...Bravo!
Nan
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11 posted 09-05-99 09:04 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Poet deVine neglects to mention that this poem was "THE FIRST" poem ever submitted to the Passions in Poetry site.... Before Ron had even made it "open" to the public..
PhaerieChild
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12 posted 09-05-99 09:14 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Poet
I never got to see this one before and I am astounded by your talent!! I am so you reposted for the benefit of the rest of us who weren't blessed enough to see it the first time around. I am really glad you told us about the main page too. Who knows? Maybe someday. For now I am content to stand in the shadow of brilliance.

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild

Nan
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Ron will be opening the main page for submissions from forum members soon - So, all of you who are interested - gather up some of your favorites, and prepare an introductory paragraph for each of them - telling why you wrote the poem, and/or how you felt at the time....
Elizabeth
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14 posted 09-05-99 10:56 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Congratulations Poet deVine-on being the first to submit to Passions and for being such a wonderful poet (just felt like saying that). I loved Serenade of the Sirens-so very sad. You said you had it hanging in your office? What do your co-workers think of "Lovers' Dance" hanging up there?

By the way, I haven't forgotten your challenge. It stumped me, but now it'll get going-how do you come up with them anyway?

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."



[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 09-05-99).]
Tyke
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15 posted 09-05-99 11:19 PM       View Profile for Tyke   Email Tyke   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tyke's Home Page   View IP for Tyke

extremely well done, thank you for sharing it

There are two tragedies in life. One is to lose your heart's desire. The other is to gain it.
- George Bernard Shaw
Poet deVine
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16 posted 09-05-99 11:49 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you all for your kind words. My purpose in posting this again was to prepare you all for the update on the main site. I hope I've sparked your interest.

And the greeting cards (like the one Nan pulled in) are created by Ron! A very talented graphic artist, besides being a computer whiz, a great poet, wonderful storyteller and all around great guy!


 
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