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Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 1999-09-04 12:53 PM

He came to the city with hopes and dreams
Of a future filled with possibility
He always had a clear cut plan
Based on his brains and ability.

He worked long days to reach his goal
No minute spent for personal time
He saved for Armani for Rolex and Rolls
Getting dollars from every dime.

He awoke each day focused it’s true
And moved through his world with ease
Until the day he fell apart
And succumbed to a worldly disease.

To stay awake he found a friend,
She was white, a powdery snow.
She cost him some money, some precious time
In the street they called her ‘the blow’.

He tried to resist her powerful pull
But was hooked on the feeling, you see.
He lost his money, lost his job
Lost his will to be free.

So which is the siren call you hear
Money, power or greed
Which is the lust that burns your heart
Which hunger do you feed?

With the pending changes to the main site and with the 'passing' of Open Forum #1, I decided to again post this poem. It was the very first poem I sent to 'Passions in Poetry'. Ron made a wonderful greeting card out of it (a copy of which is hanging in my office - along with a copy of the greeting card using the poem 'Lovers Dance'). If none of you have been to the main site, I suggest that you do. I also encourage you to post your wonderful poetry there when it reopens for submissions....the poems are read on a daily basis and are there forever. The forums are wonderful for instant gratification. But the 'public' doesn't come in here...they stay on the main site and read what's posted there. I checked the numbers tonight.....there were 3,702 hits today...and that was at 8:00 p.m.! I can't tell you how wonderful it is to receive fan mail from someone who just read your poem or just received it in the form of a greeting card! We write to touch other hearts....our poems here touch each other..then float like delicate feathers ever downward. The poems on the main site are there for all time. I truly didn't mean to bend your ear for so long, just wanted to tell you that YOU put the passion in Passions in Poetry! Thank you for posting, responding, caring and for listening!

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-09-04 12:59 PM

Rock on Lady deVine!! I loved this slice of life you chose to repost for us.

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Life is pain is poetry, at least I'll be productive.
DreamEvil©

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

2 posted 1999-09-04 01:08 AM

Great Job! Lots of thought here, holds real true! Many fall victim to it's powerfulness!

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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3 posted 1999-09-04 01:34 AM

Brilliant! You are truly, truly talented!
Great message wrapped up so nicely!

ps any idea when the main site will reopen?

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Denise

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since 1999-07-05

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Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-09-04 08:45 AM

Wonderfully written poet. I like the basis behind this one and the form works exceptionally well

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

5 posted 1999-09-04 09:24 AM

Poet deVine,
Never did read this one and I'm glad you reposted it. Wonderful poem.

Angel Rand
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since 1999-09-04

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London UK, and Zurich Switzerland

6 posted 1999-09-04 09:40 AM

DeVine I agree with Seymore! Thank you for posting it again! As I am new here I would have missed it otherwise.
Angel

Wesley the Blue
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since 1999-09-02

Posts 426
Forest Lake, MN, USA

7 posted 1999-09-05 01:25 AM

I loved your poem, and thanks for the advice about posting on the main page, when it re-opens, I would have missed that otherwise, Thanks.

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

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California

8 posted 1999-09-05 04:42 AM

DeVine One,
I have always felt this poem is a true blessing, glad to see you post it again.

Michael

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

9 posted 1999-09-05 05:03 AM

Poet, i too am glad you reposted this poem, Somehow I missed it, thank you, this is excellent, I enjoyed reading it

Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

10 posted 1999-09-05 05:10 AM

As is customary...Bravo!

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

11 posted 1999-09-05 09:04 PM

Poet deVine neglects to mention that this poem was "THE FIRST" poem ever submitted to the Passions in Poetry site.... Before Ron had even made it "open" to the public..

PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30

Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon

12 posted 1999-09-05 09:14 PM

Poet
I never got to see this one before and I am astounded by your talent!! I am so you reposted for the benefit of the rest of us who weren't blessed enough to see it the first time around. I am really glad you told us about the main page too. Who knows? Maybe someday. For now I am content to stand in the shadow of brilliance.

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

13 posted 1999-09-05 09:20 PM

Ron will be opening the main page for submissions from forum members soon - So, all of you who are interested - gather up some of your favorites, and prepare an introductory paragraph for each of them - telling why you wrote the poem, and/or how you felt at the time....

Elizabeth

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14 posted 1999-09-05 10:56 PM

Congratulations Poet deVine-on being the first to submit to Passions and for being such a wonderful poet (just felt like saying that). I loved Serenade of the Sirens-so very sad.

You said you had it hanging in your office? What do your co-workers think of "Lovers' Dance" hanging up there?

By the way, I haven't forgotten your challenge. It stumped me, but now it'll get going-how do you come up with them anyway?

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 09-05-99).]

Tyke
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since 1999-08-22

Posts 26
Calgary, Alberta, Canada

15 posted 1999-09-05 11:19 PM

extremely well done, thank you for sharing it

There are two tragedies in life. One is to lose your heart's desire. The other is to gain it.
- George Bernard Shaw

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

16 posted 1999-09-05 11:49 PM

Thank you all for your kind words. My purpose in posting this again was to prepare you all for the update on the main site. I hope I've sparked your interest.

And the greeting cards (like the one Nan pulled in) are created by Ron! A very talented graphic artist, besides being a computer whiz, a great poet, wonderful storyteller and all around great guy!

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