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Mike
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0 posted 1999-09-03 05:23 PM


On evening's breeze, I hear sweet song of nightingale,
In thy music, thou doth entice me to thine breast,
Softly tracing, seeking with thy fingers to unveil,
Mine heart's desire, thy tender touch in lover's quest,
Why doth thee seek, love ensconced in heart's dominion,
When I am thine, forevermore thy mortal swain?
Thee search what's hidden not, as sure doth rise the sun,
For all eternity as thy vassal shall remain,
Thou art the morning star shining through night's tempest,
As beacon in dark night, thou beauty ever shines,
Goddess of the night, with beauteous grace I have been blessed,
I have tasted thy lips, drank of thy fragrant wines,
And with the setting sun, as fade into dawn's mist,
I feel thy warmth on lips, where by mine goddess kissed.

With voices of the nightengale, the bards they speak of love,
Not with words of mortals, but thoughts of gods above,
They speak of Helen's beauty, that launched a thousand ships,
In vain I try to mimic, but fail with mortal lips,
For I have met my Venus, she comes in still of night,
Sweet flower of the heavens, outshines the welkin's light,
I've supped her lips of rose' wine, caressed her in my arms,
And tho', alas, a mortal be, have felt her goddess charms,
Come to me my Dulcinea, thou beauty doth entwine,
Entice me with your nectar sweet, with tastes of fragrant wine,
Quench the yearnings deep inside, desires you instill,
With pleasures of thy satin bloom, mine passion cup you fill,
Then softly steal into the night, amongst the rising mist,
For I am thine, my heart doth feel, as if by heaven kissed.

My Rose, doth not thee feel the coursing in mine breast,
That hath remained since first our lips in passion pressed?
With fragrance of thy bloom, I am touched by thy desire,
I wait the night, to once again sate passion's fire,
O' heaven's orb, next to thy grace, the stars above
Pale as the daffodil to rose of Eros' love,
Love, O' sweet love, I long the whisper of thy voice,
When thee arrives with setting sun I shall rejoice
Beneath canopy of stars, we shall e'er embrace.
I yearn thy goddess kiss upon my mortal face,
For I have met my Aphrodite, thou art her,
My beauteous Rose that comes while day doth slumber,
Unto the gods above, I sing sweet song's reprise,
For mortal to a goddess be, until the sun doth rise.

Doth not thee feel fair Rose, enchanted love
Within thy breast as welkin charms divine?
When'st thou appears, mine goddess from above,
Thy ethereal bloom doth me entwine,
Thou has assailed in quest adamantine
Against mine inner walls; breached battlements
To set me free, release love's quarantine,
For in thy passions deep, my soul relents,
Bequeathing everlastingly to thee
Eternal love, and now to thee belong,
I shall for e'er yearn my Aphrodite,
As in mine heart I sing Aglaia's song,
Dost thou love me as wholly I do thee
Or in thine eyes, shall e'er a mortal be?

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 09-04-99).]

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 09-18-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 1999-09-03 06:52 PM


OMG! This is wonderful! I felt like I was hearing it from the Bard's mouth! Great.. Wonderful......bravo!!!!!!!
Mike
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2 posted 1999-09-03 11:01 PM


Thank you poet devine...
Denise
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3 posted 1999-09-03 11:03 PM


I am speechless. This is truly poetry at its best. Keep 'em coming!!

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Mike
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4 posted 1999-09-04 11:17 AM


Thank you dsnyder. I appeciate the comment.
JohnDoe82
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5 posted 1999-09-04 11:41 AM


WOW!!!!! That puts everything I've ever written to shame. Extremely impressive. I've always liked a good sonnet, but it's been a while since I've read any poetry of this caliber. The classical allusions were brilliant. I'm out of words. Excellent poem.
doreen peri
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6 posted 1999-09-04 01:19 PM


Fabulous! Wonderful! Who ARE you??? This poetry is excellence incarnate. Publish this!
Mike
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7 posted 1999-09-04 06:49 PM


John and Doreen,
I want to thank you very much for your extremely gracious comments. Doreen, just a
person who earlier this year wanted to see if he was capable of writing poetry. I have learned a great deal from reading the fine works of those here at Passion's.

Nan
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8 posted 1999-09-05 08:22 PM


Ah, yes - I envision Secret Passionate Chambers here....
Mike
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9 posted 1999-09-11 10:12 PM


Once upon a memory, I touched upon the skies,
Kissed you gently on the lips, gazed into your eyes,
Once upon a memory, a beauteous rose did bloom,
Then rose faded in the night, farewell to Passion's room.

Denise
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10 posted 1999-09-11 10:30 PM


Hey, Mike, I hope you're not saying goodbye to 'Passions' are you? Please say it ain't so!

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Mike
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11 posted 1999-09-18 06:13 PM


I'll stop in every once and a while to read and get a poetry fix.... thanks for the comment....
Nan
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12 posted 1999-09-18 06:16 PM


You had better, my friend...
Sally S.
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13 posted 1999-09-18 08:10 PM


Absolutely brilliant, beautiful work. I'e seen portions of this once before. I don't recall if I replied to it or not. If I didn't, please accept my appology. Wonderful...really.

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"To waken doubt in one
Holding so fast by thine infinity;
So surely anchored on
The steadfast rock of immortality." ...Emily Bronte, "Last Lines"

Isis
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14 posted 1999-09-18 08:23 PM


Absolutely beautiful, I love it!!!:
When oh when will my man ever write a poem like this for me?
Beautiful job..

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~



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15 posted 1999-09-18 08:27 PM


A poem like this deserves to be at the top!
Mike
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16 posted 1999-10-26 12:37 PM


working on some followups.. easier to look back this way...
Nan
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17 posted 1999-10-26 01:18 PM


Awaiting with bated breath...
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18 posted 1999-10-26 08:06 PM


Ditto!

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Mike
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19 posted 2000-02-18 12:22 PM


Here tis.
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