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A hangman and a thief

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Master
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0 posted 09-03-99 04:06 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Find the moral of this story...

They wandered down the road of grief
Ignoring answers and advice
BOTH low and equal in His eyes
Two sinners, a hangman and a thief

It seemed THE HANGMAN had control
He was in power and relaxed
He made the thief carry his bags
AND only thirst bothered his soul

THE THIEF could not refuse this task
Although he knew it wasn’t right
He ALWAYS feared those with more might
And thus he wore his happy mask

The hangman’s craving grew with time
‘Twas not a problem for the thief
He HAD a bottle up his sleeve
He quenched his thirst with wine

THE scorching sun left its effects
The BURNDEN of fatigue and thirst
Made each one think that he was cursed
Soon, neither one could feel his legs

And both fell down, short OF breath
Upon the soft, yet burning sand
And neither one could understand
Exactly what had brought them death

The moral is not hard to find
They lost themselves inside their strife
And IGNORANCE cost them their life
Their egotism had made them blind


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I fell in love and kept on falling

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 09-03-99).]
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Master
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1 posted 09-03-99 08:53 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Find the moral of the story...
Master
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2 posted 09-03-99 11:00 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

let me know what you think...
Master
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3 posted 09-04-99 11:41 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

any1?
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 09-04-99 07:27 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Don't you hate it when no one replies? I actually liked this piece. The format you choose was an interesting one but you made your moral far too easy. Ignorance is definately a burden and one a lot of people can't get past.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
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5 posted 09-04-99 07:36 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

I agree. The burden of ignorance is both bliss and pain all rolled into one.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


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6 posted 09-04-99 07:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Another excellent one!!

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Denise
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7 posted 09-04-99 09:30 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

We're too dumb to get it. Next time, instead of just making the words bold, underline them, circle them, and put little stars around them.

Just joshing you, master. I've told you before how I admire your work. But, if you're gonna give us a challenge, put some meat in it!
Master
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8 posted 09-06-99 12:24 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks for the comments everybody.

You want a challenge Balladeer? Try to write something like that with a message in-between the lines... Thanks for commenting...

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I fell in love and kept on falling
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XCELLENT!
 
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