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Kitty**
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since 07-27-99
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Charlottesville,VA USA


0 posted 09-03-99 12:06 AM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**


When my tears turn to wine,
and I can fly like superman.
When I am as strong as samson.
or I become the devils fan.

When I can turn back the time,
and laugh in the face of fear.
That's when I'll stop loving you,
when the rain turns into beer.

When frogs sprout wings, and birds can't fly
and a grizzly bear becomes my pet.
When grass won't grow, and bugs don't bite.
and in a poker game you don't bet.

When the day comes and you say to me,
"You know I love you too"!
That's when I'll stop caring,
I'll know your words aren't true.

But until, thoes times come,
let me make just one thing clear.
Someday my love will die,
that's when I'll die too, my dear.
© Copyright 1999 Kitty Sandridge - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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since 07-20-99
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1 posted 09-03-99 01:35 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Welcome to Passions Kitty. An interesting study in meter and rhyme. Did you really pick these out or just throw them together because they fit? The thought process rambles all over the place, but then maybe that is the way you intended it to be. I am left confused by the 4th verse. I would have thought the opposit but 'hey' it's your poem. Keep writing, it is good to have you here.

INclan
Kitty**
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2 posted 09-03-99 07:33 AM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

Hi INclan..Thanks for the welcome.
This play on words is simply a late
night feeling and 'I feel sorry for me
mood'! The fourth verse does not belong
there..but was the root of these ramblings,
re: woe is me, I am unloved...
The thought process (in my case) can be
very confusing. ;-)

I have never laid claim to 'sanity'!
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