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Too Fat

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snacks
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0 posted 09-02-99 03:25 PM       View Profile for snacks   Email snacks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for snacks

She is finally grown up.
She's a girl I once knew;
my heart was her heart long ago.

She lives with a past
that locks her away
in a tomb that you'll never know.

Despite clever smiles
and charming head nods,
she sees nothing that warrents their time.

She senses a belly
where there's nothing but bone,
longing for looks so devine.

Soon smiles are lost
in eyes of pitty,
she increases the layers she wears.

They think she needs help
and tell her to eat,
but even they cannot stop the fears

Friends too soon are gone,
family gives up
"How can she keep going like that?"

They'll never quite see
it's not about food;
She wears a worn soul that makes her too fat.

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God is seen always in a child's eyes
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Nan
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1 posted 09-02-99 05:57 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

There's a very very important message here, snacks....The final line says it all...
"she wears a worn soul that makes her too fat.."
Anorexia is a very insidious disease - I pray that you or someone you know isn't suffering from it....God Bless...
snacks
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2 posted 09-03-99 12:01 AM       View Profile for snacks   Email snacks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for snacks

Thanks so much for the response and concern!!! I actually wrote this poem about a patient I saw in the hospital where I work.
But I can certainly relate to some of the feelings from my past...

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God is seen always in a child's eyes
INclan
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3 posted 09-03-99 01:53 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Welcome to Passions Snacks. I understand the plight of the family. The effects are not confined to the patient alone. I have watched a close friend suffer with her daughter. Keep writing.

INclan
snacks
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4 posted 09-03-99 08:08 AM       View Profile for snacks   Email snacks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for snacks

Thanks for the reply Inclan.You are certainly right about the effects being for everyone. This is true of any disease or addiction. It's hard to watch love ones (especially our children) suffer when there is not much we can do.Thank you for the welcome.

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God is seen always in a child's eyes
Lost Dreamer
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5 posted 09-03-99 09:01 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Sad poem I hope she survived through it all, and finds a way to lead a happier life.

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Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 09-03-99 10:33 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Snaks,
I agree with Nan the last stanza says it all.
Blondie
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7 posted 09-04-99 03:32 PM       View Profile for Blondie   Email Blondie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blondie

From someone who is going through this right now I have to say it touched me. Great work Snacks!
Sue
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8 posted 09-04-99 03:37 PM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Really well written, Snacks, I admire your vision.
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Excellently written, snacks.
Pepper
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Thanks for sharing....very well written

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
snacks
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11 posted 09-05-99 05:32 AM       View Profile for snacks   Email snacks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for snacks

Thanks again for all the nice comments. I was away from the PC for a while! It's nice to see that this poem was read.And for anyone who is actually going through something expressed in the poem, I really hope you are getting treatment because there is a lot of hope once you know this is the core issue you are dealing with...good luck.
Michael
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12 posted 09-05-99 06:09 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

The pain is quite vivid here,
deep seated emotion flows forth well in this work. Thanks for sharing with us.

Michael
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A very vividly painted picture of anorexia. You did a fine job on this piece, I only hope you don't write from experience

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
caroline
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14 posted 09-05-99 09:53 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Excellent work and thank you for sharing this.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
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