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Battle Scarred

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caroline
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0 posted 09-01-99 09:48 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for caroline

Battle-Scarred

Bold and brave and willing to fight
against any injustices life brings you
I'll not let you see the holes
in this armor, no blood from
the wounds carved by your apathy
I cleanse them with gin and cover
them with the same thin steel you
see in my eyes…you calmly
stand back and while watching me
battle for your life, you
load your gun with another round
of guilt and fire it at me…
With an aim that never misses
it tears into me yet I clench my
teeth, take the pain and remain
standing, braced for the next hit
I will be who you always wanted…
a daughter of duty, I slaughter
my dreams for yours and emerge as a
semi-crazed, battle-scarred bitch
giving orders in a backward war
while you play with your tin soldiers
oblivious to the bloodshed around you

caroline 1999
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Nan
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1 posted 09-01-99 11:18 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

'Tis intense, caroline....
You are good, indeed!
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2 posted 09-02-99 02:51 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Displays the anguish quite well, and the readers should weap.
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3 posted 09-02-99 03:33 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Excellent... very moving.
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4 posted 09-02-99 05:39 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

caroline, this is very, very powerful! The phrases you use are excellent and very hard-hitting. Brilliantly done.

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caroline
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5 posted 09-02-99 05:59 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Thank you all...this was an unsettling piece for me, as it came from a very difficult part of my life. It is, for me, probably the most emotional poem I've ever written. Thanks for your comments.

Balladeer...love your signature...*LOL*!!!

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I can feel this emotion intense
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